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cofmanynames in runaway_tales

Introducing Blueberry Yogurt!

May 27, 2010 20:53

IAuthor: C
Rating: PG13? Talk of death and Carrion kind, which are the Cil equivalent of zombie brainwashed indentured servants so yeah.
Wordcount: 460
Story / World: pre-For the Love of Words
Title: Anywhere But In Between
Prompts: Boysenberry #17: gossamer wings. Strawberry #23: boots.
Characters: Seven.
Toppings / Extras / Other: Malt: Stocking ( Read more... )

[inactive-author] c, [extra] malt, [challenge] blueberry yogurt, [challenge] strawberry, [challenge] boysenberry, [topping] cherry

Comments 7

bookblather May 28 2010, 09:01:54 UTC

Oh, wow. I don't know what's happening in any of these but the emotional content is so very strong. Or rather, I know exactly what's happening in the story itself, it's just the context that I lack. Poor Ama, though; you can tell she (and the necromancer, actually) have done something very, very wrong. And Seven is pretty awesome.

cofmanynames May 29 2010, 05:04:24 UTC

Well, considering that I'm throwing up backstory for a novel I haven't written, backstory for an AU I haven't written (though the one where Jonathan goes and is the Necromancer in the Fire and Water universe is where Ciara Jane's from also; she's reading that, in the real-ish world, and gets sucked in, sort of? Hence the habitual omniscience, a side-effect of third-person omniscient I guess), and the middle of the first book in a trilogy I haven't worked on for months, I'd say emotional content is about the best effect on people I can hope for :). So thank you ( ... )

smoothiegarten May 28 2010, 19:29:48 UTC

Bravo for taking on second-person (I could never) and making it work. It goes nicely with the kind of stream of consciousness method of storytelling you have going on especially in that second piece.

Eyes can’t be empty, Ama knows, but they can be awfully flat sometimes

Nice, and true. There is a difference.

cofmanynames May 29 2010, 05:12:14 UTC

I rather like second-person. It's a pain, but since the results seem worth it, every now and then it shows up. And I'm delighted that you liked the stream of consciousness!

*nod* Although I'd imagine it would take not getting nervous every time anyone meets your eyes to be able to tell objectively, so. Um. It would be kind of nice to live in fiction that way, where eyes are all conveniently color and depth-coded (okay, I have seen people's eyes do that sort of thing, but it's just so easier in books, don't you think?).

lady_macbeth_19 August 29 2010, 11:50:42 UTC

Oh wow. Wow. Wow. I love, love, love Jonathan. That is an amazing plot too. Someone who is so abject to killing things he resurrects them. Have you explored *why* Jonathan can't kills?
And I like the Fight Club style XD
XxLil

cofmanynames August 29 2010, 16:57:13 UTC

thank you! =D

actually, yes. so far it's got the rather low-key explanation of that 1// the first time he didn't die being when someone tried to use him as a human sacrifice at age two kind of stuck? and 2// due to the general immortality/near invulnerability it bothers him more than it would most other people when that kind of stuff happens to people who aren't ~magically protected~. ...does that make any sense?

oh, good. *grins*

lady_macbeth_19 August 29 2010, 17:35:42 UTC

It makes a lot of sense. And the ritual not dieing seems kind of scaring! XD
XxLil