Lyssa's Pocky Chain

[shayna611]

Pear #15. Fire & Ice with Cookie Crumbs and Whipped Cream
Story : knights & necromancers
Rating : PG
Timeframe : 1240's-70's
Word Count : 1043 - 11 part chain
cookie crumbs for First & Last

Continuing with the character sketches. I think they make good teasers and introductions to the cast if you haven't read me before. So far I have Kairn, Sethan

Comments

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

I think, so far, Kairn's and Sethan's are my favorite, because I actually managed to work in some stuff that was really NEW, where Lyssa and Reida have felt more like rehashing things.

I've been meaning to ask you (and if you do, don't blurt out details here) since you came in late, do you know the Lyssa/Ski/Mara secret? Because I'm realizing this reads differently if you do or don't.

[lyndsay]

Lyssa's powers really suit her personality! I love how complicated she is. It seems like each pocky describes a different part of her personality, so by the end you get a really complete, complex picture of her. Your writing is seriously enjoyable, as always--very concise, each word very deliberate.

Also, the last one makes me nervous. D:

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

Sometimes I think she might be a little cliche - hot tempered fire mage and all - but I suppose some things become cliche for good reason and it seems to work for her.

She does have a serious problem with the bottle :(

[lyndsay]

Well the last one made me nervous because it seems like Kairn is dead D: D: D: and she's so lonely!

And, I think it would only be cliche if Lyssa wasn't as well-rounded as she is. It seems like a legitimate extension of her personality, which also has a lot of other elements to it. If she were a mage of a different element we'd probably get a very different impression of her, and then it wouldn't be her!

[shayna611]

oh, no! Kairn's alive - though I Lyssa wonders sometimes if he is - he's back with Sethan at this point

[hi_falootin]

I have to echo what Matthew said about liking all of them. This is probably my favorite of the pocky chains so far and I LOVE how you used the prompt. I was wondering how the ice part would come in ;)

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

I actually had a bit of trouble with making sure ice was represented. The funny thing is, if she had a clue and tried, she could do things with ice just as she does with fire. (Fire is a bit of a misnomer where her goddess is concerned - the powers actually relate to temperature in general)

just checking

[mpiper]

'I was just checking' ->favorite line in the series.

Re: just checking

[shayna611]

hehe well, somtimes you have to make sure, you know?

thank you :)

[draloreshimare]

Wow, impressed with this chain. Lyssa seems pretty depressed, especially towards the end of this.

[shayna611]

Thank you :)

yeah, around others she can manage to be a bit tougher and careless and all (though I don't think those close to her are really fooled) but get her alone and she doesn't really cope terribly well. When I first started the story, I never really saw her that way - I kind of glossed over the whole umpteen years between when the squad was together and when things come to a head, but now I've spent a lot more time making them live those years and I think both characters and story have gained depth in unexpected places for it.

[draloreshimare]

I've spent a lot more time making them live those years and I think both characters and story have gained depth in unexpected places for it.

Extra character development is always an exciting prospect! Makes me glad that you've had them "live" all those years between through your writing. :) Like there was a prize at the end of that rainbow of writing. ^^

[shayna611]

yes, extra development is always the best :)

though sometimes I feel a bit guilty that I spend sooo much time developing and enjoying characters and not getting much of a move on the plot