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1k Marathon - Day 1

Feb 13, 2010 18:08

Mocha #24. Take it or Leave it
Story : knights
Rating : PG
Timeframe : 1260
Word Count : 2446

Well....this piece is a LONG time in coming - as in I started it in OCTOBER! This goes along with a series of pieces I posted back then :

Ski/Tristan : On My Knees

Rune/Lyssa : Look But Don't Touch, Read My LipsThis is the aftermath of both altercations ( Read more... )

[author] shayna, [challenge] mocha

Comments 10

theoryoferin February 14 2010, 03:03:07 UTC

I love the last line of this so much. Well, the whole thing, really, but the last line especially.

shayna611 February 14 2010, 05:05:33 UTC

Thank you! :)

hi_falootin February 14 2010, 05:01:15 UTC

ahh, I love this one! I love the hints of love-triangle-ish stuff going on between Rune and Ski and their whole conversation (I especially liked how they both explored the parallels of their circumstances) and then THE END. SHE KISSES HIM OMG! AND HE LEAVES! AND THE LAST LINE! That was ideal.

The beginning where he takes the bottle is great, btw. And I don't want to think about the hangover involved after drinking that strawberry stuff...poor Ski ;)

shayna611 February 14 2010, 05:16:36 UTC

Thank you! :)

This one gave me so much trouble (blame Olram for planting the seeds of infidelity...) I wanted to get to the end I did and was struggling with the earlier parts.

She is not going to be a happy camper tomorrow at all. I'll have to get back to her end of things too. I have the Lyssa/Rune part of it for tomorrow :)

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shayna611 February 16 2010, 22:26:36 UTC

Lyssa loves her Red Drank :)

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shayna611 February 16 2010, 22:26:49 UTC

Thank you! :)

slysionnachnano March 15 2010, 16:39:45 UTC

...oh wow. Drunk Ski is...amusing to say the very least? I love it when you get into the part of the canon like this.

1) I feel very bad for Ski. I don't blame her for what she's thinking, and I'm glad she gets over it. But yeah, dragging Tristan to be mocked? Poor Tristan...*tear*

2) I feel very bad for Rune, even though Lyssa isn't out sleeping around. That's not a fun worry to have to deal with at all. I like that he and Ski talk it out, and then he goes "Sure sure blah blah," basically.

3) “You’d be happy back at court with a mess of little Terrels running about your knees.” I would be. I mean. Heh.

4) The ending was priceless.

shayna611 March 15 2010, 20:19:19 UTC

Thank you very much! :)

But really, a mess of baby Terrels? No one wants that.

lady_macbeth_19 June 17 2010, 15:09:23 UTC

:( Poor Ski. But good for Rune. That I rejected her, I mean.

I feel really sorry for the both of them, especially for Ski. But she does end up marrying him though, doesn't she? And Rune and Lyssa are just a mess. A fun mess though. Well, entertaining more than fun actually. :D <3

XxLil

shayna611 June 18 2010, 17:02:57 UTC

Thank you :)

Rune is nothing if not a decent and honorable guy. And Ski and Tristan do get married (it's a few pieces down along the index from this) but there is not a happily ever after in anyone's near future.

Rune and Lyssa have plenty of good times too, but yeah, here they're quite the mess, but I'm glad you enjoy them :) They are definitely my favorite couple I've written.