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Malt Challenge - 7/30

Feb 04, 2010 23:49

Cinnamon Swirl #8. Skin Deep with Malt and a Cherry
Story : knights
Rating : R
Timeframe : 1270
Word Count : 866
Malt Prompt : pfah - skin deep : Lyssa - Too good to be true ( Read more... )

[challenge] cinnamon swirl, [extra] malt, [topping] cherry, [author] shayna

Comments 7

hi_falootin February 5 2010, 06:02:01 UTC

ahh, I love the way you write in this tense and POV! this is a seriously beautiful and sensual piece and wghilguag; I just really like it, I don't know how much more I can say on the subject!

Kairn's sort of reluctance and uncertainty vs. Lyssa's carpe diem confidence is just a great combination, and it's so freaking sweet by the end ♥hearts;

shayna611 February 5 2010, 07:01:00 UTC

Thank you so much!

It's a tense and pov I pretty much never do, but the piece just kinda asked to be written and I am really happy with it :)

kifed February 5 2010, 06:09:09 UTC

BAM! That ending is fantastic.

shayna611 February 5 2010, 07:01:10 UTC

thank you very much! :)

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shayna611 February 5 2010, 16:42:19 UTC

Thank you very much! :)

slysionnachnano March 15 2010, 20:12:38 UTC

Aww, this is an awesome POV! I love it. And I love Kairn's train of thought. It's awesome.

As is this piece. And the whole subject matter. Two thumbs way up!

shayna611 March 15 2010, 22:01:35 UTC

Thanks! :)

I am really quite happy with the way this one turned out. I'm not usually fond of such a PoV (or the tense) but it seemed right here.