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[shayna611]

Mocha #1. I Think I Can with Whipped Cream and Sprinkles
Story : knights
Rating : G
Timeframe : 1244-5-ish
Word Count : 755

Comments

[slysionnachnano]

You make me sad. Poor Ilya! She can too be a good knight! She can!

I like this glimpse into her past. She's one of your sprinkle characters that I've always been a bit more interested in.And now I suddenly realize that I did miss them...

[shayna611]

She really is stronger than she looks, so I think Kinari is in for a surprise.

Thanks! :)

[hi_falootin]

ooh, I like this-Ilya seems even more tiny and meek getting talked around like that. And Kinari seems pretty cool. Great line from her about butterflies! I'd love to see how her training classes go :D

The display of white teeth amongst dark beard was so tight it seemed as if it could crack. is a great line

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

Like I said, that talk the other day made me feel like she needed a bit more rounding out (the whole trio does really). And Kinari is the new major player I've been talking about for awhile (I'm still kind of torn as to whether she should get hot fudge - my villains are always so grey!)

[fachefaucheux]

Oooh, I liked this one a lot too. Nice plotting going on in the background there. Yes, we definitely need more along this vein. ^^

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

I've got a fair idea of where Kinari weaves in, but just have to get up more of an interest in working on her. There will be more!

[fachefaucheux]

There better be! *shakes fist*

[shayna611]

Thanks! :)

I'll have to get back to them - they will definitely come up more as Mara gets older.