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Vanilla #2 - The Sniffles with added Wafer Cookie

Sep 18, 2009 00:24

Author: Regret
Rating: G
Challenge: Vanilla #2 - The Sniffles
Extras: Wafer Cookie - a sketch
Word Count: 606
Summary: Simon catches a cold.
Notes: He seems to like FPP, so... more first person present, until I can kick reticent!muse into third person past like, y'know, normal.

( Of all the- ...I've got a cold. )

[author] regret, [extra] wafer cookie, [challenge] vanilla

Comments 14

hi_falootin September 18 2009, 00:00:08 UTC

your FFP is fun! don't fight the muse ;) This was quite cute. This line in particular made me smile:
his insanely long hair is standing at angles it would normally take a team of professionals hours to achieve, and his eyes have deep, dark marks under them.

and the picture is adorable!

nothingtoregret September 18 2009, 13:58:18 UTC

I've got visions of trying to do NaNoWriMo in FFP, and I think 50k words of anecdotal style writing would finally send me loopy. O_o;

Still, so far I've written more in these two days than I have in months, so I think I'll follow your advice. ;)

I'm glad it could make you smile. ^_^

iamintroversion September 18 2009, 00:32:44 UTC

Very cute. :) And the picture is adorable! I like the line about his nose running marathons, best. :]

nothingtoregret September 18 2009, 14:00:47 UTC

Thank you! ^_^ I've got to admit, that's my favourite line too... ^^;

thebaobabtree September 18 2009, 00:44:02 UTC

hey i like this so far. the drawing is nice too. great job.

nothingtoregret September 18 2009, 14:02:10 UTC

Thank you! ^_^

I'm oddly happy with the drawing 'cause it really was just a quick sketch and it it came out way better than most of the stuff I take time over. *shakes a fist at it*

etchandetchan September 18 2009, 02:15:27 UTC

Seconding the FPP thing, you worked it really well here. I quite enjoyed it.

nothingtoregret September 18 2009, 14:03:21 UTC

Aah, the way things seem to be going, everything I write might well end up in it! x__o Can't seem to construct a halfway decent sentence in third any more without deleting it in disgust...

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

nathskywalker September 18 2009, 08:30:01 UTC

I like the natural humor in Simon's narration and feel like it would get lost in third person, so, much to my surprise I agree with Falootin. Don't fight the muse.

The sketch is also really nice although for one moment when looking at it I wondered what was wrong with their ears. Silly fantasy illiterate person that I am... XD

nothingtoregret September 18 2009, 14:18:37 UTC

I'm really happy that you think so! It's... a little disconcerting that it's the only thing I seem able to write right now, but... I have to admit, I do quite like how his voice is coming along so far. ^^;

Haha, I'd actually kind of hoped that it may be a little bit of a surprise... ^^; I've been trying to write him like a 'regular person' who just happens to have long ears. ^^;