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First Story - Carob #4 (Inferiority) - Delivery

Sep 17, 2009 14:57

Author: Erethas
Challenge: Carob #4 (Inferiority)
Title: Delivery
Story: Falkens
Rating: PG
Wordcount: 455
Summary: Bandacor the gryphon is flying through a storm, embroiled in his thoughts.
Notes:I am welcoming all constructive criticism ( Read more... )

[challenge] carob

Comments 4

nathskywalker September 18 2009, 00:45:03 UTC

added your author's tag.

just a suggestion: try using paragraphs. Blocks of text are usually harder on the eye.

streamfern September 18 2009, 02:46:39 UTC

Woo, thanks for the author tag! I shall make sure to add more paragraphs. My mistake, heh, I don't do so well when writing stories in Word.

Thanks for the advice =D.

intothewolves September 25 2009, 15:02:54 UTC

Very nice! The whole dragon lord/gryphon thing really interests me, I hope to see more from you :)

streamfern September 28 2009, 22:10:55 UTC

Oh, thanks! I am pleased that you like it. It's quite sketchy at the moment but I hoped in the near future to add some bulk to the dragon lord thing.