Comments | runaway_tales: 2 pockys : "fish hook" and "monster"

hi_falootin in runaway_tales

2 pockys : "fish hook" and "monster"

Sep 27, 2008 02:03

These are both little brother-sister moments Jason remembers from when he was younger. So I wrote them in the past tense which is WEIRD FOR ME (but not cherry-weird, I don't think).

Author: hi_falootin
Prompt: mocha 8. 'tis but a flesh wound
Word Count: 99
Rating: G

( fish hook )

[extra] pocky, [author] falootin, [challenge] mocha

Comments 13

shayna611 September 27 2008, 13:32:33 UTC

I love that last lines of both of them :)

hi_falootin September 27 2008, 17:32:53 UTC

Thank you! We've all been going a little pocky crazy around here, huh? ;)

shayna611 September 27 2008, 18:52:59 UTC

it does seem to be quite popular, but I actually find being that concise a bit difficult!

hi_falootin September 28 2008, 00:49:47 UTC

me too, actually! I had trouble making the first one short enough.

maiden_rising September 27 2008, 16:13:59 UTC

Those are both fabulous! On the rare occasions that I have fished, I always worry that I'm going to accidentally pierce somebody's lip. And in the second piece, Dee jumping into bed with Jason "so you won't be scared" is terribly endearing and funny. Well done!

Now all I need is some time to sit down with MY story...although if I'm forced to wait until after Brian and Emily's reception next weekend, I can probably incorporate real-life wedding-reception details, which could be sort of fun.

hi_falootin September 27 2008, 17:35:49 UTC

I'VE BOTH HOOKED PEOPLE AND BEEN HOOKED D: Actually, I might have hooked myself. It's probably a bad idea to let 8 year olds fish.

Oh man, I hope you find something amusing at the reception to include in your story. You should eavesdrop on a lot of conversations, y/y?

maiden_rising September 27 2008, 17:48:33 UTC

Oh hell yes. I actually justed posted what might be part I of the wedding reception fiasco...I'm seriously considering posting a part II, depending on what people say about the first part.

kusarinokokoro September 27 2008, 19:44:45 UTC

Very nice! And yeah, there HAVE been a lot of pockys (pockies?) lately, haven't there?
I went fishing once but I had to let the fish go because it was smaller than the legal limit.

hi_falootin September 28 2008, 00:51:30 UTC

thanks! I went fishing a lot when I was younger but I haven't been in ages...I had to ask someone what the right phrase for "release the bail" was. I'm still not sure "bail" is the right spelling...

slysionnachnano September 27 2008, 20:54:25 UTC

Ugh, fishing and hooks *shudder*

I loved them both, especially the last one. It made me smile because I'd do what Dee did.

Great job!

hi_falootin September 28 2008, 00:51:58 UTC

aww, thanks! glad you liked 'em :D

kage_ankoku September 28 2008, 06:41:44 UTC

I love these two stories. x3 And like Shayna said, the last two lines in both stories are awesome and I love them so.

Well done!