i keep runnin' runnin' runnin' for horrours
Title: i keep runnin' runnin' runnin'
For: horrours
Pairing: Lu Han/Xiumin
Rating: PG-13
Length: ~8,600 words
Summary, potential warnings: Going to boarding school in America, Lu Han just wants to forget he's the (adopted!) son of a duke and focus on two things: soccer, and Minseok. That doesn't really work out.
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For: horrours
Pairing: Lu Han/Xiumin
Rating: PG-13
Length: ~8,600 words
Summary, potential warnings: Going to boarding school in America, Lu Han just wants to forget he's the (adopted!) son of a duke and focus on two things: soccer, and Minseok. That doesn't really work out.
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"They're a bit wobbly, and Lu Han can see where they cheated a little on one of the corners, but the lines are bright and it cheers him up to see them restored to their standard whiteness." swooning at your amount of detail, please teach a class on How to Details, please and thank you
"...the kick of his heart whenever he sees Minseok laugh victoriously at slipping past Lu Han's guard to score a goal." i swear to god, i made the strangest noise here. i feel like my heart was the one being kicked, not lu han's. also crying a little at how subtle this was. sometimes you really don't need skywriting or a circus tent of words to get through to your reader when someone has Feelings
"Lu Han is strong and tall and independent, too, but not in an effortless way like Minseok is." painful, you are. look, you've turned me into yoda. i don't even know how that happened.
"...he sits next to Minseok and Minseok lets him curl up with Lu Han's head on Minseok's shoulder and Lu Han thinks about how he'll never tell Minseok how he feels about him." why do you do this? i was completely convinced this little paragraph was harmless and then O W. OW, I SAY!
"Each time, Minseok wakes him up with a sleepy smile himself, his eyes asking Is this worth it? and Lu Han nodding yes yes yes." THEIR RELATIONSHIP. IT'S SO. THERE ARE SO MANY THINGS UNSAID. I LOVE HOW CAREFULLY YOU CRAFT THIS. I'M SORRY FOR YELLING.
"For a second, Lu Han considers telling Minseok how he feels about him." I'M HOLDING MY BREATH
"No, I can't, he thinks, and the moment is over and Lu Han sits up..." i'm whimpering into my pillowcase
Chanyeol leans his head back against the wall and moans out, "Oh, Kris, please." kris, didn't you have a job to do? shaking my head right now.
what the fuck do you mean go away?? what about captaincy try outs??? why are you doing this? why? EVERYTHING HURTS.
It takes extra long to wash his face because her lipstick refuses to leave his skin as easily as sweat and dirt. whoa.
"Shit, Minseok," Lu Han says, finally, the words hurrying out too fast for him to stop it. "I'm in love with you and if we don't try out for captains tomorrow, I'll never forgive myself, please -" i slapped a hand over my mouth and it hurt so badly but i'm okay, i promise. just a little emotional. i love how you can catch your reader so off guard. it's really a talent.
that was... that was wonderful, authornim. i don't think you fully comprehend how wonderful this was. this is the longest fic comment i've ever given on rng, on anywhere, really, and it's so well deserved. i absolutely love the little setting details and your careful word choice and how you can turn the feeling of sentence around in the very last phrase and leave the reader reeling. it's incredible and i really want to thank you for putting so much effort into this. i hope your recipient enjoys it because i really did! thank you for everything ♥ soccer/football xiuhan view matches in minseok's dorm, on the same bed, probably not cuddling, but thinking about having each other close all the same. oh god. i think i ship xiuhan now. i never thought the day would come.
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