(no subject)
more comments
There’s not much to comment here -__- it’s kinda a slow chapter. I didn’t know Shinya would be so trusting. He just followed the man’s direction to Toshiya’s house. He could be lying u noe … Shinya tsk. But hey, I noticed something. Didn’t Die resuce Shinya out of the same situation Toshiya’s in? So without Die, maybe Shinya would have a fate worse than Toshiya’s?
I wonder if a rival gang leader came by and saved him, or else he would have been dead by now. Of course, to thank the leader for saving him, Toshiya now had to work under the dude …. signifies something in the later chapters of this fic? no? Prob just me lol.
I know that in a fic, it’s good to be as realistic as possible, but don’t you think ur fic is a bit depressing? Every character is lonely, helpless, hopeless and fighting life. I feel so sorry for them, going to school and work so hard at the same time. Poor kids -__-“ I feel the same way about Hakuei too. I don’t know his background and stuff. He’s quite un-readable here.
A ring means possession to the other person, while a watch represents the giver rather than the person accepting the gift. lol I know you said he’s harmless but when Shinya’s left alone wh Hakuei I was like no!!!! Want to do something that'd keep us warm? Noooooooooo!!!! XDD but at least Shinya’s being a good lover, worrying about Die.
I didn't know how much more I could open up to him; I think I was willing to give everything to him if possible. At night, in between dreams, I often wondered if I was doing the right thing...
Of course he was doing the right thing. Wasn’t he? Why did he say that? The last line made me worry >.>
Niimura Tooru!!!! Oh.My.God!!! XDDDD Are you gonna pair him up wh someone? Is he getting a spot in this fic? Cuz I kinda Like Hakuei x Kyo, and I love Kyo x Toshiya LMAO.
I don’t know what’s up wh Shinya. He seems uncertain when it comes to his boyfriend, but he’s already making plans for next year wh his sensei! Told ya, I hate boyfriends who don’t show up >.> no matter what reason he has. If this is a love triangle, it’s as easy as turning a baby’s palm. And how come he’s spreading an ‘ending’ feel to the fic?
”Anyways, you should go back now, I'm going to head off to work as well."
"Be careful."
"I will."
We always said so to each other, hoping that nothing will happen to the other person.
"Don't forget me when I'm not here." He'd always add that on as well
-____- like they’re dying or something. And twitching left eye … no…
Lol the next chapter is much better! I never expected Die’s buddies would be so accepting. And moving in together sounded so fun. But what was Hakuei’s present?? … was it …? LOL.
Die is four years older than Shinya, and eight years older than I *blushes* It’s amazing how they’re in the same class. But hey, Shinya’s thinking of the future! With Die! What a good lover he is. I too was surprised they hadn’t done it. But chapter 14 was cut off, did they do it??
There’s not much to comment here -__- it’s kinda a slow chapter. I didn’t know Shinya would be so trusting. He just followed the man’s direction to Toshiya’s house. He could be lying u noe … Shinya tsk. But hey, I noticed something. Didn’t Die resuce Shinya out of the same situation Toshiya’s in? So without Die, maybe Shinya would have a fate worse than Toshiya’s?
I wonder if a rival gang leader came by and saved him, or else he would have been dead by now. Of course, to thank the leader for saving him, Toshiya now had to work under the dude …. signifies something in the later chapters of this fic? no? Prob just me lol.
I know that in a fic, it’s good to be as realistic as possible, but don’t you think ur fic is a bit depressing? Every character is lonely, helpless, hopeless and fighting life. I feel so sorry for them, going to school and work so hard at the same time. Poor kids -__-“ I feel the same way about Hakuei too. I don’t know his background and stuff. He’s quite un-readable here.
A ring means possession to the other person, while a watch represents the giver rather than the person accepting the gift. lol I know you said he’s harmless but when Shinya’s left alone wh Hakuei I was like no!!!! Want to do something that'd keep us warm? Noooooooooo!!!! XDD but at least Shinya’s being a good lover, worrying about Die.
I didn't know how much more I could open up to him; I think I was willing to give everything to him if possible. At night, in between dreams, I often wondered if I was doing the right thing...
Of course he was doing the right thing. Wasn’t he? Why did he say that? The last line made me worry >.>
Niimura Tooru!!!! Oh.My.God!!! XDDDD Are you gonna pair him up wh someone? Is he getting a spot in this fic? Cuz I kinda Like Hakuei x Kyo, and I love Kyo x Toshiya LMAO.
I don’t know what’s up wh Shinya. He seems uncertain when it comes to his boyfriend, but he’s already making plans for next year wh his sensei! Told ya, I hate boyfriends who don’t show up >.> no matter what reason he has. If this is a love triangle, it’s as easy as turning a baby’s palm. And how come he’s spreading an ‘ending’ feel to the fic?
”Anyways, you should go back now, I'm going to head off to work as well."
"Be careful."
"I will."
We always said so to each other, hoping that nothing will happen to the other person.
"Don't forget me when I'm not here." He'd always add that on as well
-____- like they’re dying or something. And twitching left eye … no…
Lol the next chapter is much better! I never expected Die’s buddies would be so accepting. And moving in together sounded so fun. But what was Hakuei’s present?? … was it …? LOL.
Die is four years older than Shinya, and eight years older than I *blushes* It’s amazing how they’re in the same class. But hey, Shinya’s thinking of the future! With Die! What a good lover he is. I too was surprised they hadn’t done it. But chapter 14 was cut off, did they do it??