BASIC GRAMMAR IS NON-NEGOTIABLE.
WRONG:
"Dude" Frank yelled "this is fucking awesome! I always wanted one of these!" cackling delightedly he launched himself into Bob's arms. Bob staggered almost dropping Frank. "Jesus you're fucking heavy Iero. Get off me" "Awww you say the sweetest fucking things"
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NOT ENTIRELY WRONG:
"Dude," Frank yelled. "This is fucking awesome! I always wanted one of these!" Cackling delightedly, he launched himself into Bob's arms.
Bob staggered, almost dropping Frank. "Jesus, you're fucking heavy, Iero. Get off me."
"Awww, you say the sweetest fucking things."
***
See what a difference it makes to use a few periods, commas, correct capitalization, and paragraphs to separate speakers? SUDDENLY, YOUR FANFICTION IS ACTUALLY READABLE.
[Example written by me, but based off of METRIC ASS-TONS OF BADFIC.]
"Dude" Frank yelled "this is fucking awesome! I always wanted one of these!" cackling delightedly he launched himself into Bob's arms. Bob staggered almost dropping Frank. "Jesus you're fucking heavy Iero. Get off me" "Awww you say the sweetest fucking things"
***
NOT ENTIRELY WRONG:
"Dude," Frank yelled. "This is fucking awesome! I always wanted one of these!" Cackling delightedly, he launched himself into Bob's arms.
Bob staggered, almost dropping Frank. "Jesus, you're fucking heavy, Iero. Get off me."
"Awww, you say the sweetest fucking things."
***
See what a difference it makes to use a few periods, commas, correct capitalization, and paragraphs to separate speakers? SUDDENLY, YOUR FANFICTION IS ACTUALLY READABLE.
[Example written by me, but based off of METRIC ASS-TONS OF BADFIC.]