fic: Acceptable Terms

[rubberbutton]

Title: Acceptable Terms
Pairing: H/W
Words: 2,300
Rating: PG-13? Sexual language and making out
Summary: So...why does House ruin all of Wilson’s relationships?

Wilson threw open the door to House’s apartment, looking extremely irate.

House glanced over from his place at the piano, unalarmed by Wilson’s emphatic entrance. “My, you’re all

Comments

[elva_barr]

This was sweet, Wilson's annoyance and later acceptance is well-put. (Although--'inevitable' should be 'inevitably' about a quarter through your story.)

[rubberbutton]

(Although--'inevitable' should be 'inevitably' about a quarter through your story.)

Good spotting and thanks. Here's a cookie and a gold star.

[axmxz]

Poor House, resigned to being hen-pecked. But hey, at least the sex promises to be good - and free! XD

[xdragonsbreathx]

Ahahahahaa...that's amusing, to say the complete and utter least. The line about the emo kids was just perfect!

'M not any good at all at pulling the meaning of life out of anything and everything, and I don't see the Virgin Mary in my food, so I'm just gonna skip the monologue and tell you that this was great, and I want more, alright? If it makes you feel better, just pretend that I did. I imagine that whatever you can dream up is much better than what I'd actually say if I tried.

Right. Nitpick time. Just one error that I noticed:
... reading his *lists* of misdeeds with ... Lists in the plural? Or list in the singular with an extra 's'?

Write more, will ya? I might actually start following certain authors, and not just anything I get my hands on, then!

[elynittria]

I loved this! They're totally in character working out the terms of what they'll never call their relationship. Glad to see them finally get their acts together, though!

Copyeditor mode:
House relaxed a little, yielding and Wilson let him go,
There should be a comma after "yielding."

Bracing him himself against the back of the couch,
An extra "him" snuck into this sentence.

[rubberbutton]

They're totally in character working out the terms of what they'll never call their relationship.

I figure they can deal with it as long as they don't have to worry about unmanly labels.

And thanks for the copyeditage. Which isn't a word, but should be.

[purridot]

This was super. Great repartee -- not just witty, but a lot of suppressed feelings underneath and poking through. So happy to have read this!

[rubberbutton]

So happy to have read this!

I aim to please. Of course, it helps that I really enjoy the sideways, not-quite-a-confession-of-love way of talking the boys frequently use. It's their own sort of code.