Comments | rthstewart: Harold and Morgan: Not A Romance Chapter 10

rthstewart

Harold and Morgan: Not A Romance Chapter 10

Jun 19, 2011 18:12

Chapter 10 is UP, finally. Shocking, but it got long, so I need to finish up the second half of Conclave which is the very oldest part of the story in my head and very visual and so I've struggled with it. But this is still 9,000 words or so, so, yeah, time to get it UP AND DONE. The full exchange between Pierce and Maeve is in this chapter. ( Read more... )

sex is funny, harold and morgan

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autumnia June 19 2011, 23:27:08 UTC

Just reviewed, and now I'm intrigued by the inclusion of the nursery rhyme.... Did the Maid do it, with the candlestick dagger rahat in the billiard room cellar delivery room?

And I think you should change the blackbirds to Rats and Crows. :-)

rthstewart June 21 2011, 00:51:49 UTC

I thought about trying to redo the rhyme, but I just wanted the darn thing UP. It's funny -- when I first started this, WAY BACK WHEN, I had been visually inspired, such as it was, by the movie Becket, with Peter O'Toole and Richard Burton and the black bird was Becket's symbol. Blackbirds became crows, which became the line in Chapter 8 of Part 1 about the Rats and Crows, which then became BRD. Heh.

florentinequill June 20 2011, 00:22:51 UTC

Heee. Reading the chapter right now. I read the word "Lightning" and started giggling xD I love how Pierce actually has the list of people ready to kill him for having sex with Maeve.

It's very interesting to see things from Pierce's POV especially once you move back to the plotty things. I love the not-a-romance aspects of the story but right now the plot has me thoroughly intrigued :)

rthstewart June 21 2011, 00:59:37 UTC

I love the icon! Yes, Pierce is a bit of a pig. He's a nice, respectful, pig, but he's just a GUY and can't quite help himself. I've got the next chapter and that's all in Pierce's POV too. As for the final Lone Islands chapter... I'm not sure if I'll even go back to Edmund's pov. I've got... GASP... Morgan's point of view...

The trunk had a false bottom. Morgan could see that. It sounded differently, hollow-ish and the trunk wasn’t as deep as it should be - smaller on the inside than it was on the outside, so there were secret compartments.

Morgan felt like that’s how she was, broken into so many pieces and compartments. Because she was so broken, she had always been good at puzzles and patterns. She knew just how to make each piece fit just so, in trunks and spreadsheets and bricks in buildings, she could see the threads no one else could see, count all the beans in a jar, and know when things just didn’t add up. She just never could make her own pieces fit.

therck June 20 2011, 00:34:12 UTC

I enjoyed seeing all of this from Pierce's point of view. He has a clear understanding of the banking side of things and leaves us wondering about what Edmund is up to.

Thanks for writing!

rthstewart June 21 2011, 01:00:08 UTC

Thank you so much!! I so appreciate hearing from you!

lady_alys June 20 2011, 01:57:01 UTC

Bad link is bad. :-( (Found the chapter anyway, but thought you should know -- off to read!)

rthstewart June 20 2011, 01:59:52 UTC

BAD Link! Thank you!!! and now it's fixed!

rthstewart June 21 2011, 01:00:42 UTC

Thank you for letting me know about the link. I used the new ff interface for the first time it was a FAIL. I hope you liked it.

lady_alys June 22 2011, 00:08:04 UTC

I liked it very much! I fail at feedback so I doubt I've commented before, but I've been thoroughly enjoying all of your fic, and am anxiously awaiting the rest of The Apostolic Way.

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min023 June 20 2011, 21:10:05 UTC

Wonderful update. I love what you've done here: the OC POV is very effective in showing Ed's character and development. I wanted to smack Pierce upside the head for a while there - he was getting rather ahead of himself, contemplating pregnancy after just one encounter - talk about giving a girl some space to get her head together. And the repeated line 'Narnia is coming' made my hair stand up - it's so full of portent and meaning. Oh, and Constance and Maeve's prescience - I really want to know what comes next now :-)

rthstewart June 21 2011, 01:23:05 UTC

Yep, Pierce is just such a GUY. It was a little unsettling to write something like that, but as I said in the other post, there's a point to it, and it is real. It's a more parochial and patriarchal view of things. And he's so cavalier about it. Babies! GREAT! I had a whole bit of internal dialogue where he was thinking of fondly of teaching a daughter or son how to use an abacus and learn numbers. I may trot that out somewhere else ( ... )