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Life Yet Unwritten

Mar 06, 2008 20:33

Title: Life Yet Unwritten
Author: phoenixfyre13
Format & Word Count: Ficlet, 750ish
Rating: PG
Prompt: since feeling is first (Prompt 1)
Warning: Err. Birth?
Summary: Remus Lupin has always believed his life was written out for him. But Nymphadora Tonks has given him hope that there may be more.
Author's Note: A little different than I started out with, but I ( Read more... )

prompt 1, phoenixfyre13

Comments 8

bookish_brownie March 7 2008, 02:54:34 UTC

Aww, that was absolutely lovely. I really like how you have the story divided into "chapters." There's such hope in this piece, and it all flows so nicely. Great job!

p.s.- I love your icon.

phoenixfyre13 March 8 2008, 14:51:22 UTC

Thank you very much! :)

I really like cummings' use of sentence structure and grammatical terminology in describing the human life, and that influenced the theme around this story as much as his words did. I am very glad you enjoyed it!

And thank you about the icon! Isn't it fabulous? I think whoever made it no longer has an account with LJ, but I gave credit anyway because I couldn't stand to think of it as being unused,
LOL.

pinkhairedauror March 7 2008, 07:56:33 UTC

This is a very, very good piece of writing, and I totally have goosebumps from reading it. Oh yes! Well done, and thank you so very much for sharing!

And oh yes... love, so much love between them, among them. *whispers* and welcome to this world, Teddy Lupin.

phoenixfyre13 March 8 2008, 14:55:26 UTC

I am very glad you enjoyed it, and mighty pleased with the goosebumps, LOL! ;)

And thank you for whispering. It feels like one of those moments, doesn't it? :)

carnivalgirl March 7 2008, 21:11:23 UTC

Oh, so emotional and lovely! I like how Remus chose Teddy's name, not Tonks, and...well, everything really. How they were unprepared but they're OK. The chapter idea really worked well with the prompt, especially the last one. Awww....

belladonna1986 March 7 2008, 22:02:41 UTC

Wow ( that words seems to be my common reaction to good fic now, lol)
I love this, it's gentle and lovely, and I especially like the structure and idea of life as a story divided into different chapters. It's only a few words but they are so full of meaning and just wondeful.

Great work!

rainsoulx March 10 2008, 14:40:00 UTC

I agree with the others: the idea of chapter was very nice and well used.
I felt a bit sad reading the last sentence, but it's also a line that fit the situation if we think we're writing and reading fanfiction about two dead (napping?) characters.
Soft and nice, I liked it!