Fic: Good Samaritan for jellybgood

[rhye]

Title: Good Samaritan
Author: planetgal471
Recipient: jellybgood
Rating: PG-13
Highlight for Warnings: *minor violence, mention of minor injuries*
Word Count: 2048
Summary: First war AU. Remus tells Sirius about his Order Missions. Sirius insists on coming along to the werewolf pack. Was this part of some bigger plan?
Author's notes: Beta'd by pot_of_coffee

Comments

[brighty18]

This was really compelling - and very emotional - and I felt myself very caught-up on the action.

Over and over again the werewolves would follow a relentless cycle: they'd posture, mock-attack, be fought off by Moony, slink back and seem to consider leaving, and then turn and posture to begin the routine over again. They didn't do this just twice or even just a few times, but their cycle lasted the entire night; a mini-revolution in the pack's mood underneath the slowly-revolving Moon. And the Earth, Sirius's only ally, revolved as well, bringing the Moon towards its setting, as Sirius stood, trying not to shake and show fear, for long and relentless hours of Moon-filled night.Damn, but that is a scary (and wearying) thought and you wrote it well

[lady_luthienne]

Wonderful! I always enjoy reading animal Remus and/or Sirius! I love Sirius' determination to go along, and how they worked together to save the little boy, Padfoot defending him and Moony defending Padfoot.

I love to think that, at least in the beginning, their love would win out over wartime secrecy and suspicion.

[phiso_kun]

I like this. A lot. I love how Remus snaps and just tells Sirius everything, how Sirius suddenly feels ashamed for being so difficult about it when he discovers what exactly Remus has been up to, how the fear and determination and love between them is like a string, something that ties them together and makes them stronger as a pair than any other pack they can come up against. It was sad, noticing how the young men twitched at the sound of concern in Sirius's voice, and I was impressed by the strength Moony had on his own, his own ferocity enough to keep the other wolves at bay.

I hope that kid learned something from this, that a werewolf can protect one they love, and that not all of them are bent for blood.

Dumbledore kicks ass, and just to be nitpicky for your sake (I hate it when I miss things like this, myself), you need a period at the end of this sentence:

Remus's clothes must be several miles away through the woods, sadly, and Remus was starting to shiver

And yea. GOOD JOB! :D <3

[rhye]

Thank you, period added! Those little types of errors drive me nuts.

[jellybgood]

Wahh~ how wonderful to come home from work and read this! I love Moony protecting Padfoot from the other werewolves, and ultimately saving the little boy too. Hmmm, and Dumbledore conspiracy, dun dun dunnn.. I'm impressed you fit so much action and drama into a short piece. Love it all <3 Thank you so much! ^__^

[lotrwariorgodss]

I think we see from the books and just from knowing Remus's character that his worst fear is turning an innocent person, especially a small boy like he had been when he was bitten. I think he can be comforted by the fact that he was able to suppress his werewolf instincts here and help Sirius protect the boy, and now that he's confided in Sirius, maybe their future isn't so bleak! Nice work!