Day 15- Fic: Team Canon: Les Bienfaits de la Lune

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Team Canon
Title: Les Bienfaits de la Lune
Author: ceredwensirius
Rating: Light R
Warnings: Peeing as a form of unfortunate marking (but not watersports)
Genre: Angst
Word Count: 3231
Summary: It is a cruel twist that it is not only Remus who must suffer the wolf, but the wolf too, must suffer Remus.
Notes: 1. Read more... )

Comments

[bookgrrrl2006]

i would have liked this much better had my boyfriend's pitbull not just pissed on my handbag. now i am afraid she's in love with me. i'm kidding, of course, but not about the piss in the handbag.

honestly that was beautifully written. you are quite the sophisticated writer and i adore the way you poetically describe something as "vulgar" and genitals. remus' relationship with the wolf was really astounding. i don't usually quote things back, but i loved this: "In no measure does the wolf understand Remus’ adoration for Sirius, his love or desire. It is a cruel twist that it is not only Remus who must suffer the wolf, but the wolf too, must suffer Remus. It is a beast of the woodland that has been funneled into the blood stream, trapped by Dark Magic that only lets it break free a handful of times a year, and then only in part. They are intertwined, intimately and irrevocably, and yet wholly distinct, oil and water, a perverse patch-working of magic that leaves neither whole, never free.this was beautiful and ended happily making it

[ceredwensirius]

When I read your review I snorted coke through my nose. I am sorry for your purse. :(

Thank you very much for your kind words. I wanted this piece to have a certain 'feel' to it, so that when I took the you the reader to a not so pretty place, you might not mind so much that I took you there, if that makes sense. It needed to be pretty, because what I was working with, wasn't.

Well, this really needed a happy wrap up you know. I'm not that cruel!!

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!!

[werewolfsfan]

As he stands silent, teeth gnashing, blood pumping in jealousy and anger, the wolf that runs circles in his veins mocks him, silent as ever, for not taking, claiming, owning, what should be his, what he wants more than air, more than sunlight, even more than the wolf wants the moon. He has just passed Sirius, his Sirius, his beautiful raven haired god of a boy with his chest pressing against some person, could be boy, could be girl, but not him, never him. It is only with a will born out of years of self control, of forcing the canine in his veins to remain leashed, that he is able to move his feet, look away, move along.You owned my heart from the opening paragraph! From the fact that the wolf is ever present inside of the boy, to your beautiful phrasing to the jealousy, I knew I was in for a good tale! And you didn't disappoint at all. The wolf's way of marking territory will be distasteful for some but the way you portray the agony and dilemma as well as the realistic handling carried the day. I really didn't know if this tale

[ceredwensirius]

This review made me do a little dance, just so you know. I really thought that you might not like it (though I was really hoping you would) because my intent was to separate Remus from the wolf, let him be a boy with an overwhelming problem. I know you are his #1 fan, and I wasn't sure how you would feel about me doing that.

It was distasteful, which is why I was so careful with my wording. It needed to be pretty, because where I was taking you, really wasn't.

Oh, I pretty much have to have my happy ending. I am a sucker and entirely too predictable on this account.

Thank you so much for this splendid review.

[duck_or_rabbit]

You've taken a big bite out of wolflore. This could have been shallow and weak. Nope, deep and strong, and I think converts werewolf!Remus' qualities into human!Remus perhaps as well as I've ever read (across a wide range of pairings, even).

This poignancy

To the wolf, what is natural, understandable, even needful, is a mate, a compliment, a female. It wants to reproduce, create a new generation to carry on its blood, Remus’ blood. Remus has no desire for this and it is a constant struggle between them, but even the wolf can sense when his battle on this issue is a lost cause.

is heavy with meaning, the refrain strumming through the piece. And doesn't in the least foretell Tonks' presence in Remus' laterlife after Sirius' death. I shall not mention such a thing here.

Fandom can underestimate Remus, give into Sirius being the badboy in the pair, which, can be misleading, as well. But your characterizations give them far more credit than that, showing Sirius' own depth of understanding and, hell, his want of Remus. I'm convinced of

[ceredwensirius]

I did take a snap at wolflore and it made me nervous as hell to do it too.

converts werewolf!Remus' qualities into human!RemusThank you so much for mentioning this, because this was really the point of this piece. When I think about Remus, I see a man who wants so desperately to be seen as a man, and not a monster. I am good friends with the girl who I wrote this pinch hit for and Remus is her #1 guy. But she loves him with all of his lovely human foibles and flaws and not as the more fandom-y 'sexy beast in the sack werewolf' that (is hot as hell, I'll gladly admit to that) we are often treated to. So, it was my aim to do show him as a boy, a man with, but with a very serious problem that exists outside of his control

[remuslives23]

That was wonderful. So beautifully written. My heart just broke for Remus. Lovely. :)

[ceredwensirius]

Thank you so much!!

[secretsolitaire]

Really interesting look at how the wolf affects Remus. Also, a cool use of the prompt -- after reading this, I imagined the two figures in the picture to be Remus and Moony, in a way.

[ceredwensirius]

Thank you, it was interesting to write. And yes, it was a sort of loose interpretation of the prompt in that I took them apart and dealt with them as separate entities, both of whom are ruled by the moon.

Thank you for your review!!