Day 1 - Fic: Team Place: The Fall

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Place

Title: The Fall

Rating: PG for non-explicit sexual content

Warnings: none

Genre: Angst, Canon

Word Count: 4600

Summary: They've told you that dying is like falling asleep, but to you it just feels like falling. But before you fall, you remember.

Notes: The moment I had finished listening to this song, I punched the air and yelled IT'S

Comments

[bookgrrrl2006]

oooooh, it can't think of another story i have ever read in 2nd person and it made it very powerful to me. i read a novel about that once (it was about diphtheria in the 1800's, i think) and i round it very moving, but knowing the characters as i do here made it even more so. this gave me chills. i really felt like sirius.

[museinabsentia]

Wait, wait, wait, no one said I was going to cry on the first day of the games!

This was lovely, if heartrending. I'm usually not a fan of second person POV, but it worked incredibly well here, giving it that far more intimate feel. Also, the non-linear timeline just made the gut punch all that more terrible, all the happy moments interspersed, a reminder of the good things lost. Incredibly well done.

(All comments duplicated both here and AO3, because I don't know who finds it easier to check where.)

[bearshorty]

So beautiful.

It's the language that caught me first, with the "drapes that feet soft as cobwebs on your skin". And then emotion. And you just had to break my heart both with the first memory of lying on the same bed and being so far apart, and the last, of them trying to fix it but too late.

Just gorgeous set of memories that just tug and encompass everything I love about this pairing. And the 2 person worked really well here.

[ruinsplume]

This was beautifully done. Your technique for handling the transitions was brilliant. Not only did I never get confused, but you made all the shifting around in both place AND time poetic and moving; the transitions felt so true to how the mind and heart work associatively. And the sad! I was already choked up by the scene where Sirius reflects that they can't get married, and then your ending! You killed me. What a great start to the Games; I can't wait to find out who you are so I can read more of your work. PS: Great use of prompt, too!

[huldrejenta]

I love this!! So beautifully heartbreaking <3

I've left a slightly longer comment on AO3 :)