Day 14 - Team Star - Fic: The Hunter's Dog

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Star
Title: The Hunter’s Dog
Rating: T
Warnings: light swearing, vague suicidal ideation
Word Count: 3000
Summary: “You will be the brightest star, Sirius,” their father continues, ignoring Regulus. “Everyone will know who you are.”
Notes: Eternal and unending gratitude to the mods for their assistance, patience, and perseverance in putting

Comments

[museinabsentia]

Wow, this was beautiful, in a painful sort of way. I love Sirius' relationship with the stars throughout all the different points in his life. So hopeful in the beginning slowly slipping down until the end, which was utterly heartbreaking. And the scene with the thunderstorm just broke me a little. Just a truly wonderful job.

[mutuisanimis]

OH HEY it's you :) And me :)

Thank you so much for your lovely words! The thunderstorm was inspired a little bit by one we had near me while I was working through this.

[hugs and gives chocolate]

[bookgrrrl2006]

oh, that was so beautiful and heartbreaking and perfect. it was so poetic and you used repetition (when sirius was x years old) beautifully. i would love to see it illustrated as a picture book. it read like that to me and i fell in love with your words and voice.

this line was really great, 'everything is so open. the next seven years stretch out before him, full of wonder, empty of impositions.' gah! i have no words.

i loved the very first part more than i can even say. you perfectly captured the feeling of being a small child. the bit in which regulus roars and his father chastized him and the bit in which sirius wonders about hunters, lions, and dogs, just made me want to scoop up both boys and hug them. poor things.

and the ending was heart breaking but perfect. i was half-hoping that you would continue on and tell us about escaping and reuniting with remus and death, but it really was a perfect way to end it.

so lovely!

[mutuisanimis]

Hello! Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to this, my life is a little up in the air!

I'm glad the repetition worked for you! Now I have that picture book stuck in my head, wow. Maybe when I learn to art I'll work on that...

As for the ending, that was the first scene that came to mind, and I knew it had to end there. I didn't even think of gong further, but now that you mention it I know I couldn't have done that justice.

Thank you so much for all your kind words!

[bearshorty]

Lovely. I adored all the conversations about the stars and how the stars defined Sirius' life.

The scene in the storm was hard but in a good way - it's been so long that I read fic about the Incident that I almost forgot it happened. And I love reading about it! It's the best angst. And your writing captured the emotions so well.

I also liked where you ended a story.

[mutuisanimis]

Thank you so much! Sorry for the delay in replying-I've been very out of touch with the internet lately.

[sighhhhh] the Incident can't keep itself out of my writing, and every time I have to go look up what year it was in >.< I'm so glad you thought the emotions worked.

As I mentioned above, the ending was the first scene that came to mind, and I could not have gone any further. I'm glad you liked that!

Thanks for your lovely words :)

[dogsunderfoot]

Very nicely laid out, almost like navigating by stars!

Beautifully written scenes. I loved the one with the brothers and Orion. Well done!

[mutuisanimis]

Thank you so much! Little Regulus snagged my heart.

[abyss_valkyrie]

Awwwh!The ending made me feel so much for Sirius!I really do adore how you wrote young Sirius's thoughts,gosh,he is so cute- looking at the stars and pondering! Really cool entry for team star using the stars and Sirius's relationship with them throughout his life.

Plus,Regulus is just so so soooo sweet there,I felt sad when you wrote about how Sirius worries about contacting him before leaving.

[mutuisanimis]

Sirius and Regulus' relationship is one of the most fascinating ones in Marauders fic to me, and I'm so glad you enjoyed my exploration of it!

Thanks for your kind words, and sorry for the delayed reply! I've not been online much recently.