Day 10 - Team Moon - Fic: Watching Stars Collide

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Moon
Title: Watching Stars Collide
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Smoking, quite a bit of swearing, drowning your feelings in tea or hard liquor, as well as the usual warnings for general first war misery, [canonical] character death & unjust imprisonment.
Word Count: 16,919
Summary: Remus and Sirius, a flat in the colder seasons of 1981, and how

Comments

[bookgrrrl2006]

over the next week, something unfurls between them, tides under a waxing moon, flowers from the bud. seagulls carry on outside the windows, wheeling and chaotic in the air, and sirius starts to soften, at the same time as he seems to solidify in the most inexplicable way possible.oh, sigh. that passage just killed me. this whole piece just killed me, really. so sad and subtly tragic and yet so well-written. it was really beautiful from beginning to end

[cevennes]

oh man, these are my two favorite eras, and this fic captures so much of why that is. I love the way things unwind in part I--the ragged pain of it--and then how they coalesce in part II, how they brighten and fuse back together again. There's so much amazing imagery in this, from the bleakness of the first war to the richness of the earth and Remus's house and the sharpness of every feeling; I especially love your Remus, bruised and brittle and growing a bit distant with age ("[...]I just learnt to work around the bits of me that weren't alright, I think." is probably the truest thing ever written about Remus Lupin and I LOVE IT), but learning to thaw again along with Sirius. Seeing them finally say they loved each other was as much a heartbreak as it was a thrill

[bearshorty]

I really enjoyed the juxtaposition of both time periods. Both Remus and Sirius spoke and felt like real people and I could feel all the emotions you were trying to show. Very well written story.

[abyss_valkyrie]

This is a place where the past tends to creep up behind you, rest its hand on your shoulder and whisper in your ear about slow summers long gone, the ones you missed somehow as well, the moments of happiness you did manage to snatch from the jaws of un-luck and the apple tree you used to climb when you were a child to snatch sweet, worm-infested fruit from its branches.

This part really is so vivid like every other line in this story,but somehow I can't stop loving it! Such a wonderful view of Remus and how he ponders on their relationship-they didn't know what love was when young and messed it up, such a contrast to their present days when things have a sort of peaceful,calm,grown-up feel to it all.Love love love your writing!! <3

[dogsunderfoot]

This was beautiful. I love this beyond measure.

The dialogue is fantastic--I love sharp, witty banter and comebacks, even if they're just as simple as a 'fuck off'. You captured that boyish bravado wonderfully, yet I felt every jolt and ache and stab and twinge that they did. The downward spiral they were on was written so clearly, laid out in such a manner that it all seemed so natural and obvious why they didn't trust each other at the end.

And then... their reunion and the awkwardness of learning each other all over again and working through everything...
"Even when they were happy, they weren’t, because Remus didn’t understand how to want something without being too afraid to touch, and Sirius wasn’t sure how to love gently enough not to destroy, and together they’d made such a ruin of it Remus isn’t sure now how they managed to stay together at all, let alone thought they’d liked it... This summarised their relationship, both in your story and in my mind and heart. Absolutely perfect