Day 11 - Fic: Team Magic: Right From the Start

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Magic
Title: Right From the Start
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: non-linear timeline, mild swearing
Word Count: 10635
Summary: In which the Marauders celebrate group bonding, and PoA!Remus reflects on the past.
Notes: Literal unending thanks and gratitude to J, S, F, and M for their help in plotting, untangling, and typo-finding. Could not have done

Comments

[cevennes]

I'm trying so hard to reign in the urge to slam my finger down on capslock and the exclamation mark because that is just what this fic did to me, oh my God, my heart, my everything. I cried, like, not even delicate sniffles you can cover up pretty easily, but full-on, nose-running, let-me-bury-my-face-in-my-hands-and-wreck-my-eyes crying. Wow.

I love non-linear stuff and you pulled this off so beautifully it absolutely sings. I love your Remus so much it's honestly kind of difficult to find the words; he's so hopeful as a young man, and he retains some of that in spite of it all as an adult, and I absolutely loved how you wrote him here, all his melancholy and his kindness but still with that undercurrent of anger and always the sadness bleeding into his edges. He's beautiful and I love him a whole lotAll the boys feel so young and bright and alive here, and it was such a joy to read them and how the theme threads through them at school, and then again when Remus is so much older. Sirius trying to dig up the box after he's escaped

[mutuisanimis]

~~~~~~~~wwwwwwww;laskdhfasflkhadfsf~~??????

You are TOO KIND, ahhh thank you, friend! *belatedly offers lots and lots of hugs and tissues*

[museinabsentia]

Yup. I adore this. Your Remus' pain (and longing) are so very clear. I love how the non-linear timeline makes Remus' unwillingness to completely believe in what happened, even after all those years, so much more obvious (and understandable) because it was intermingled with all the good times.

All your little details, too, add up to make this more a piece of art than a story. Remus feeling the need to take off his shoes when sneaking through the castle, James and the golf ball, the failed transfiguration of the oak tree, those small little things make this so easy to picture. And then the contents of the time capsules. Both of them. Such wonderful additions that all speak very clearly of who each of them were and who they became as they open them. Getting to see Sirius finally read his letter was just so bittersweet. It's finally okay for the two of them again, and they still can't be together. Go ahead, break my heart.

Totally wonderful job.

[mutuisanimis]

I love how the non-linear timeline makes Remus' unwillingness to completely believe in what happened, even after all those years, so much more obvious (and understandable) because it was intermingled with all the good times. -- OH MAN, I hadn't even done that consciously but you're totally right!

*offers you a bandaid for your heart*

Thanks so much for all your help, darling :)

[museinabsentia]

Of course, gotta love when your writing is going so well you do incredibly clever things BY ACCIDENT! :P

And any time.

[bookgrrrl2006]

that was simply brilliant! what an original idea. that is something i love about this ship and this fest. it always seems like people come up with the most creative and original ways to freshen up canon. you did it very well, too.

i liked that it skipped back and forth in time. the non linear thing really worked well. all your characters seemed very consistent from time period to time period too and that really says a lot.

thank you for writing a smart peter too. that can really make a story for me.

good job, mystery author.

[mutuisanimis]

I'm so glad this worked for you! I'm really happy you thought the characters were consistent. Thanks so much for your comment!

[huldrejenta]

Amazing, dear MA, just amazing, and I loved this so much!
I adore your Remus, and I love the idea of this time capsule and the way it binds the story together.
I got all misty-eyed more than once, which really doesn't happen all that often when I read. First time when Remus tried to rub his hands together to get warm, only to find that two hands alone weren't enough anymore - then when Remus discovered that someone - a dog - had been trying to get to the time capsule the two of them made; oh my, the idea of PoA-Sirius trying to find this sign of love in his past really got to me. And then when Remus read Sirius' letter, I was a mess, in the very best of ways. The ending, beautiful and hopeful even though they still aren't together, was a perfect way to end this. Well, I could easily have read much more of this, but you left it in a wonderful place.
Your language is gorgeous, and I adore every word of this <3

[mutuisanimis]

Thank you so much! Remus seeing that a dog had been digging was one if the first things I knew about this story, so I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you for your kind words <3

[bearshorty]

This was so sweet in the end. I like the idea of time capsules and your story captures the best of Marauders. Loved their interactions. And tiny details of leaving shoes off to sneak around and getting food in the kitchen. Great look at 3rd year, 7th year and adult lives. And great job on capturing friendship with Peter too and subtle hint why Peter would feel 'less than' sometimes - it is rare for a story to pull that off well. A really enjoyable read.

[mutuisanimis]

I'm so glad you picked out why Peter would feel less-than. It's always tricky to write Peter intelligently but also justify his treason. I'm glad my characterisations all around worked for you! Thank you <3