Day 16 - Fic: Team MWPP: Days of Dust
Team: MWPP
Title: Days of Dust
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Language
Word Count: ~5,200
Summary: It all starts on a bench. Maybe it isn't special or fantastic, but if you try hard enough, anything's possible.
Notes: Title taken from the song I Will Wait by Mumford and Sons. Huge thanks to E for the wonderful beta job and for being so very patient with ( Read more... )
Title: Days of Dust
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Language
Word Count: ~5,200
Summary: It all starts on a bench. Maybe it isn't special or fantastic, but if you try hard enough, anything's possible.
Notes: Title taken from the song I Will Wait by Mumford and Sons. Huge thanks to E for the wonderful beta job and for being so very patient with ( Read more... )
The way the seasons come and go, everything the bench has seen as if it's a living being - it's all told in such a vivid language.
Your descriptions of the boys are also lovely, and I especially like this about Remus:
His brown hair glints in the sunlight between the swaying, creaking branches of the trees and he hugs his limbs closely to his body, frail-looking knees supporting a heavy book.
It's very easy to imagine that little boy.
I really like the idea of them having a place that's theirs, a place where they meet when they're not at Hogwarts, and I like that so many crucial events in their childhood and youth take place here. It gives such a nice structure to the story, and it's very sweet and romantic!
And this is wonderful:
'Remus Lupin, this is your key. A key which I would like you to use every day, especially when you move all your things in, which means I would like you to move in with me, which means I would like you to share my bed and make me breakfast and maybe sometimes I'll make you breakfast and then we can sit on the sofa and you can read to me while I pretend to listen but really fall asleep and then you can kiss me awake.'
Well done!
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