Day 28 - Team Remus - Fic: Between the Lines

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Remus
Title: Between the Lines
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: horror, canon character deaths, werewolf conversion of five year old Remus, sexual references, angst
Word Count: 10,136
Summary: Remus had difficulty explaining his history to Sirius until Sirius suggested he write it down. Remus expressed himself in fairy tale form, using blood magic to

Comments

[bookgrrrl2006]

this was really cool. it really, really felt like remus, too, mystery author. what i mean is that both the story-within-a-story and the regular, canon parts really seemed to have his touch.

i also have to say that the beginning was really scary and almost troubling in its realness. fenrir seemed so much a like a child molester that readers could really relate to the fear. that's good storytelling.

this paragraph was really great:
The boldest Marauder was said to be very handsome, but Moony didn’t see it. He saw an abundance of ability with a deficit of common sense and a sharp wit completely devoid of conscience. He saw misapplied genius, shrewd eyes and a rebel to the core. This blackest of rapscallions had an oversized ego, but his heart was larger still and surprisingly fragile. Moony had begun falling in love with one of his friends. As luck would have it, this friend began loving him back. i liked seeing sirius though remus eyes.

i also really liked the way you used the brown font and the bolded words. it was very visual.