Youth for thesiriusmoon (Welcome to March)

[duck_or_rabbit]

Title: Youth
Author: duck_or_rabbit
Challenge: er, March 2009 for thesiriusmoon
Rating: PG13
Word count: ~ 1000
Warnings: Something like infidelity. Depends on what you believe.
Summary: And he now being thirty-five, no longer nineteen, was almost a relief to Remus.
Disclaimer: Characters are the property of JK Rowling and associates.
Key words and dialogue: rabbit (!),

Comments

[hrymfaxe]

Oh I really really like this... The difference between Remus' expansive internal observations/memories and the sparse dialogue is wonderful.

There is a richness of backstory to this short piece that is very fascinating, and immediately clues me in to how Remus has lived before and how they are now. It is all transitory - Sirius not having any belongings in the house, any traces of other men being easy to clear away or hide, Remus' nightly stands (or kneels! I appreciated that one a lot! ;))..

My heart breaks a little for Sirius' enthousiasm for the insignificant task they have assigned him. And how he is also (wilfully?) ignorant of what Remus is up to. It's like he is a little naive, and unused to human company, which makes perfect sense with regards to all those years he lost.

I also really like how Remus cannot really wrap his mind around Sirius. And these two lines tells a little of why it is so hard:
"Time and age revealing he wasn't a inscrutable transcendent force."

"bestowing upon him twenty years ago even in the absence of youth in the present - that unnatural power he had returned."

&hearts for this story. :D Thank you for sharing it!

[duck_or_rabbit]

I'm always astounded at the wonderful things you say. You know, one could get too used to that, yet I like being made comfortable, so stick around.

The difference between Remus' expansive internal observations/memories and the sparse dialogue is wonderful.

Oh! Thank you. A 'This Is An Experimentation In Form' statement almost made it into the A/N, but now I've said it down here in the comments and I don't need to say it up there; thanks for noticing it and pointing it out. People's consciousness take such different shapes (I presume, I've only mine) that I wanted to try out what it could be like for Remus to be both talking to himself and someone else simultaneously.

It's like he is a little naive, and unused to human company, which makes perfect sense with regards to all those years he lost.

One element purposely attempted here is that Remus perceives Sirius as really trying. In OotP, Sirius seems biblically angry, and he ought to be, yet I wanted this to be a prelude to that in which the anger isn't as acute.

♥ ♥ ♥ you for reading -- I know it's time spent by you. Thank you.