Battle of Eyes

Apr 23, 2008 09:29

Title: Battle of Eyes
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dalehead April 23 2008, 09:22:34 UTC
I'm up for the challenge - do you wanna see what I write first? Cos I think I am going to take it off at a tangent that you might not expect *ggg*How would you like for this to work?

And I loved it up to date btw - very hot.

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rotpunkt April 23 2008, 09:27:59 UTC
Great! Just go for it - surprise me! :) I'm open for the unexpected!

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dalehead April 23 2008, 12:10:30 UTC
I think I won't actually, I read the other comments and I wouldn't want to upset anyone, it was just I saw challenge and reacted to it.

*hugs* But thank you for throwing open the doors.

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rotpunkt April 23 2008, 18:02:18 UTC
Awww ... :). And I'm so curious already! Don't want to talk you into anything, but you really don't have to worry, no one will be upset. While it is possible to find the scene needs no other end, because Sean left hanging there fits the whole thing (being not half and not whole :), I can very well imagine another end, too (and I gave the challenge because I somehow would like a bit 'more' and not have it end there ...)
If you feel better with the option, you can also email me your suggestion under klatschmohnrot at yahoo dot de. But as I said, I don't want to be pushy :)!

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govi20 April 23 2008, 09:22:39 UTC
It's a very special fic, written marvelously. Maybe it's just me, but I don't feel like it needs more than this. I understand your/Sean's state of mind very well, sometimes life is like that. Thanks for posting.

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rotpunkt April 23 2008, 18:04:21 UTC
Helena left it up to me whether I'd want to add more or think it's enough. It fits my state of mind that Sean (= my identification person in this case) is left hanging there, but on the other hand I'd like to have that changed :)!

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lab_jazz April 23 2008, 11:37:29 UTC
I love this Anne!

One moment of hesitation on his part had toppled his fragile, house-of-cards position

That line demonstrates so well the power struggle that constantly exists between Viggo and Sean...

Like Carol, I don't think that the story needs any more.

Lyn

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rotpunkt April 23 2008, 18:06:01 UTC
Yeah, helena wrote that line and perfectly summed up what I was aiming for! I somehow like the idea od this special way of switching roles, but somehow I couldn't really go through with it, really very much like the Sean of the story ...

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rotpunkt April 23 2008, 18:08:39 UTC
Thank you for the encouragement! I think writing this will hopefully have been a first step to regain my balance :). Somehow, your icon fits the 'battle of eyes'-situation, with Sean just giving up ... :)

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rotpunkt April 24 2008, 18:50:35 UTC
Yes, I see Viggo the same way. As for Sean, when I wrote that his clumsiness is all gone as soon as they change roles, I wanted to indicate that it may be what he needs in this moment - to be the sub. BUt that can change! :)

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caras_galadhon April 23 2008, 19:25:38 UTC
You know -- and I hope you won't take this amiss, since it's a testament to the writing -- I find this fic rather unsettling. I'm not sorry I read it, and I do believe it's good, and I am honestly going to be thinking about it for a long while. I'm not sure how I feel about how Viggo reacted to Sean's state, and what that says about their relationship. You've given me a lot to think about, here, and for that, I thank you. ^_^

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rotpunkt April 23 2008, 20:14:14 UTC
You very much point at the crucial question and I explained to dienw (below) what I think about it so far... I'm not yet through with it mentally; somehow had the feeling I couldn't get through it all by myself, therefore I'm grateful for the fb that helps me come to clearer thoughts!

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