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over the past couple months I've written various verses, but I havent ever really finished any of them. I was hoping someone could give me some feedback, ideas, etc etc etc..so help me out! remember, its still just a work in progess and they may not all nessecarily be part of the same song..but here we go.
you were there when i kicked the plaster through the wall
gave me the sharpie to cross our names off the bathroom stall
when she said we'd be together forever
you never turned your back to me even when she was a tether
that one special summer with no strings attached and we all just had fun
things will never be the same but some may last forever
wasting our days away in a dreary parking lot
when the girls came and the girls caught you were there for me when i was LEFT TO ROT
all my gratitude and my word to give you
maybe its not much but when you out i'll still be looking out for you
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it must be pretty nice
to never work a day in your life
be allowed to fool around
while the rest of us have no choices
pop fills the wallet so you'll never worry
the futures been given to you while mine still looks blurry
an honest days work for an honest days pay
what makes who the better man
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i read about you in the papers
they said you were the one
it wasnt the one i thought it'd be
i thought we'd have some fun
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disdain in what i have become
found the things to stay away from
melt down as in years before
one more chance and nothing more
fake smiles like cubic zirconium
false promises covered in pallidium
she knows your heart will burn when made of plastic
she wont with the bottle and aver fantastic
open up and open wide
a face like yours is hard to find
how am I to be happy with who I am
wheres the glory to become a man
3:29 and I can't even rest
I thought there was glory when you tried your best
a burnt cigarette is just a butt
underneath the ivory you're still a slut.
can't ascertain what you said last night
my own worst enemy is your own plight
three unrequited voicemail
the more i've tried the more i've failed
never ask never lied never stole nor beg
never should have believed those things I thought you said
he said there were plenty of fish in the sea
i happened to pick the fruit of the poisonous tree
age 18 with a mask of plaster
three months two weeks one day all end in disaster
6:19 where's my fun
lifes on hold in the midnight sun
every apology I'll never accept
when you're alone thats all that you'll get...
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HELP ME OUT. and dont waste my time with stupid comments, please
you were there when i kicked the plaster through the wall
gave me the sharpie to cross our names off the bathroom stall
when she said we'd be together forever
you never turned your back to me even when she was a tether
that one special summer with no strings attached and we all just had fun
things will never be the same but some may last forever
wasting our days away in a dreary parking lot
when the girls came and the girls caught you were there for me when i was LEFT TO ROT
all my gratitude and my word to give you
maybe its not much but when you out i'll still be looking out for you
-------
it must be pretty nice
to never work a day in your life
be allowed to fool around
while the rest of us have no choices
pop fills the wallet so you'll never worry
the futures been given to you while mine still looks blurry
an honest days work for an honest days pay
what makes who the better man
---------
i read about you in the papers
they said you were the one
it wasnt the one i thought it'd be
i thought we'd have some fun
------------
disdain in what i have become
found the things to stay away from
melt down as in years before
one more chance and nothing more
fake smiles like cubic zirconium
false promises covered in pallidium
she knows your heart will burn when made of plastic
she wont with the bottle and aver fantastic
open up and open wide
a face like yours is hard to find
how am I to be happy with who I am
wheres the glory to become a man
3:29 and I can't even rest
I thought there was glory when you tried your best
a burnt cigarette is just a butt
underneath the ivory you're still a slut.
can't ascertain what you said last night
my own worst enemy is your own plight
three unrequited voicemail
the more i've tried the more i've failed
never ask never lied never stole nor beg
never should have believed those things I thought you said
he said there were plenty of fish in the sea
i happened to pick the fruit of the poisonous tree
age 18 with a mask of plaster
three months two weeks one day all end in disaster
6:19 where's my fun
lifes on hold in the midnight sun
every apology I'll never accept
when you're alone thats all that you'll get...
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HELP ME OUT. and dont waste my time with stupid comments, please