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Dec 16, 2005 12:17
This is part of a story I've been kinda working on for a while. This is not the complete story, as the complete story is non-existent. I want feedback, please please pretty please.
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rejectionslip
December 17 2005, 04:29:48 UTC
You're sentence structure's a little choppy.
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rosenewtricks
December 17 2005, 15:46:24 UTC
I'll fix that too. :)
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rejectionslip
December 17 2005, 17:10:47 UTC
The your/you're mistake.*
And I was hoping no one would catch that, but I CAN'T PUT ANYTHING PAST YOU!
I love you, and I'm going through withdrawal.
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rosenewtricks
December 17 2005, 22:03:04 UTC
Oh it's OK. I get confused easily. lol.
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hazedsentients
December 17 2005, 07:46:55 UTC
pwnt
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rosenewtricks
December 17 2005, 15:46:12 UTC
I'll fix it. :)
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And I was hoping no one would catch that, but I CAN'T PUT ANYTHING PAST YOU!
I love you, and I'm going through withdrawal.
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