Gone to Earth 28 & 29
With chapters 28 and 29, Gone to Earth takes protagonist Shika Praluna right to the precipice. The war she has hoped to stop by finding the Incarnate of the goddess Asti appears to be breaking out, but it turns out to be something much worse.
She interviews a rogue archaeologist who spouts bizarre conspiracy theories, including an old one about planet Zurus not being the original human homeworld. Readers liked the interview, enjoying the wordplay between him and Praluna as she tried to draw out his knowledge regarding the Incarnate. Chapter 29 ends with the space station they're in coming under attack. "I can't believe you broke it off right there!" said one reader impressed with the cliffhanger, which others really appreciated as well.
There were three unabashadly positive critiques, one of which was summarized with the phrase "This is rocking hard!", which Kapoor assumes is a good thing. The mixed critiques pointed out flaws in the world building. Readers were uncertain about the relationship between the galaxy police and the ligares; some felt that the discussion of Zurus as the human homeworld should have been hinted at earlier; others have simply forgotten some of the terms and concepts introduced early on in the book, since it was read a year and a half ago. "I'm confused," complained the only solidly negative critique. "I'm totally disoriented [by the jargon and place names]."
Kapoor proposed a Dune-style glossary and gazetteer, which seemed to go over well with the group. Great. More work for Kapoor!
Three positives out of eight makes for a rating of 38% on these two chapters. That indicates it's a fairly typical draft with some areas that may need complete rewriting but is otherwise solid.
She interviews a rogue archaeologist who spouts bizarre conspiracy theories, including an old one about planet Zurus not being the original human homeworld. Readers liked the interview, enjoying the wordplay between him and Praluna as she tried to draw out his knowledge regarding the Incarnate. Chapter 29 ends with the space station they're in coming under attack. "I can't believe you broke it off right there!" said one reader impressed with the cliffhanger, which others really appreciated as well.
There were three unabashadly positive critiques, one of which was summarized with the phrase "This is rocking hard!", which Kapoor assumes is a good thing. The mixed critiques pointed out flaws in the world building. Readers were uncertain about the relationship between the galaxy police and the ligares; some felt that the discussion of Zurus as the human homeworld should have been hinted at earlier; others have simply forgotten some of the terms and concepts introduced early on in the book, since it was read a year and a half ago. "I'm confused," complained the only solidly negative critique. "I'm totally disoriented [by the jargon and place names]."
Kapoor proposed a Dune-style glossary and gazetteer, which seemed to go over well with the group. Great. More work for Kapoor!
Three positives out of eight makes for a rating of 38% on these two chapters. That indicates it's a fairly typical draft with some areas that may need complete rewriting but is otherwise solid.