Comments | riyku: fic: Night Shift

riyku

fic: Night Shift

Aug 08, 2013 21:06

Title: Night Shift
Genre: Jared/Jensen AU
Rating: nc-17
Word Count: 2600
Summary/Prompt: Jared is a hooker, Jensen is an undercover cop on a sting.
Notes: For juice817, for her wonderful prompt over yonder at the little kinky comment meme. In the spirit of the meme, please feel free to comment anonymously.

( Night Shift )

fic: j2, rated: nc-17

Comments 72

dear_tiger August 9 2013, 01:56:19 UTC

Oh yay, this was great :D I love the little kiss on the cheek, and my absolute favorite part is that short paragraph at the end, the part where Jared suddenly becomes a complete person in Jensen's eyes. I could just picture it so clearly, and it was a perfect wrap-up to the story. (Also, to be one of those people, MOAR?? I want to know what happens next!)

riyku August 10 2013, 03:13:44 UTC

Goodness, thank you! As for the peck on the cheek, I swear sometimes I write this stuff and should just hang a neon sign over the things that says, 'Hear Ye, Hear Ye, This Way to My Kink!!' Man, oh man. I have no idea what happens next. Probably something along the lines of Jared becoming Jensen's C.I., only they're too busy fooling around during their covert operations to actually fight crime. Or something.

So glad you liked this!

dear_tiger August 10 2013, 04:02:05 UTC

...and then they fight crime together \o/ (sometimes). I like! I was worried for a minute if they were really never going to see each other again. Still, I'll be over in the bushes, stalking your journal for a sequel.

fourtenpm August 9 2013, 02:31:34 UTC

I was thinking there was no way that Jared couldn't tell that Jensen was a cop, then hot happened, and bam, he became a person, and this person... I don't even know what happened here, just that it's heart-wrenching.

riyku August 10 2013, 03:14:48 UTC

See what happens when I try to write straight up porn? I always end up either sappy or heart-wrenching. It's a problem. Thanks so much for the note!

tebtosca August 9 2013, 03:18:01 UTC

“But at least with you I don’t have to lie.”

Should be the motto of all J2 hookerfic haha.

Oh man, this was so good, uber-hot and angsty. I find myself highly intrigued by Jared and want to know his story!

riyku August 10 2013, 03:18:54 UTC

Hahahahaa! A motto for us all! So glad you liked the line. Hot was the goal, and I have no idea where all this angst is coming from?!? I try to write porn. Angst. I try to write fluff. More angst. And then angst. It's a problem.

Thanks for the note!

fiercelynormal August 9 2013, 03:38:44 UTC

So good!

riyku August 10 2013, 03:19:03 UTC

Thank you!

charmedstrange1 August 9 2013, 03:46:34 UTC

Before I even read this I was gonna be a smartass and comment that looking at the word count and the premise, I could already tell it wasn't going to be long enough and that I was going to want a sequel. Well I went ahead and read it first, and it isn't long enough and I want a sequel. ;)

No seriously, it's perfect. Angsty and real and so much potential, in both of them. Oh, and HOT. I loved seeing your Jared through your Jensen's eyes.

Now I just need the 25,000 word backstory on them both and what happens next. ;)

amberdreams August 9 2013, 08:55:06 UTC

Seconded!

riyku August 10 2013, 03:23:57 UTC

Hahahahaaa! Smartasses are more than welcome! And dude. This was supposed to be a commentfic, like, a thousand words, tops. Clearly brevity is not my strong suit AT ALL. It was supposed to be porn, pure and simple, and a thousand words in, built in premise of hookers and everything, and nobody even had their pants off yet.

Really though, it's always such a delight to describe the wonderful creature that is Jared Padalecki, and I'm so happy to know that you liked this. Thank you!