SPN fic: Knight Moves

[rivkat]

NC-17. If you don’t read Sam/Dean, don’t read this.
Spoilers for S3.

Comments

[meret]

I don't know whether to laugh or cry! Great story! I had to go back and read the whole thing again once I got to the end. I especially like then Sam’s movements smoothed out, hit a rhythm like a well-tuned engine. *g*

[rivkat]

Thanks! I think Dean only knows how to choose between laughing and crying most of the time because he hates crying.

[murklins]

WHAT? and also: YES. A world of yes. HA. OMG.

So one word sentences appear to be the order of the day now. This sort of blew my mind a little. In a really good, hot, fun way.

[rivkat]

I can't help it; I love Dean/Impala, any way I can get it. Glad you liked it!

[norwich36]

Wow. While I was very much enjoying the extremely hot Wincest as I read, I was expecting some kind of twist--mind control or amnesia or something as a result of the witch's spell--but I have to say, I completely was NOT expecting that. Damn.

Rereading, though, I love how cleverly you give it away without giving it away in the very first line: "The spell slammed Sam into the Impala". Not to mention that not only was Sam unusually compliant (which I did pick up on the first time through) but the car was fighting Dean all the way (which I didn't pick up on until the second time through). Hee hee! Not to mention that the Impala basically ended up waxing Dean just the way he had waxed her earlier in the day.

And I love the language in this story a lot, lines like Dean could feel the weight of Sam’s attention on him, like another source of heat in the room. It was like morphine, or blood loss; it pressed him down into the bed, as if his bones had turned to iron. And I loved this line when I first read it, thinking it was exactly how Dean

[rivkat]

Thank you! I was trying to keep a balance between giving clues and not having it be ridiculous that Dean didn't notice. Fortunately I'm aided by canon in thinking that Sam can be simulated as long as you know something about him.'

I'm glad the metaphors worked for you. I wanted them to be very concrete, from a guy who's not fond of fancy language.

I have a lot of sympathy for the machine in this equation. Which maybe says something disturbing about me, but you probably knew that already.

[very_improbable]

I totally called it, but I do not wish to imply that I loved it any less for the fact that I totally called it. That was seriously great.

[rivkat]

I'm glad it was enjoyable even when you figured out the twist! Just out of curiosity, when did you know? ("The first line" is a perfectly acceptable answer.) The only time I've ever figured out a twist in advance was The Sixth Sense, at the anniversary dinner.

[very_improbable]

At the fourth paragraph, I went, "Oh, he's the car. That's awesome." And then it was like I was in on the secret, so it was fun on another level. (Sign of a well-constructed story, there: Does not become boring if you guess what's going to happen.)

May have been easier for me because I don't actually watch SPN, and as far as I can tell from fandom, the main characters are these two really slashy brothers and this car... :)

[ladyagnew]

His friggin’ car. He loved her, of course he did, knew every inch of her, but - he’d fucked his car, and somehow that was worse than what he’d thought he’d done.

Oh yeesh, I agree, Dean. It is kind of ooky, and yet I cannot blame the Impala. She saw an opening and took it, and er, made the best of things. After all, a woman in love and everything; I love that she curled around him after sex and made Dean promise to do everything it took -- and Dean said yes.

The last bit in the Impala is interesting. Dean loves his car, but he's always going to think of Sam first and last.

[rivkat]

It is ooky beyond a shadow of a doubt. But I, too, have great sympathy for the Impala, making hay while the sun shines.