Challenge #07 Inspiring Quote
Title: Holosuite Five
Word Count: 539
Rating: General
Original/Fandom: Star Trek: DS9
Pairings (if any):Kira Nerys, Jadzia Dax
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): None
Summary: A gift from Jadzia
Link: The door slowly slid shut behind as Kira Nerys stepped into the holosuite. Jadzia Dax had asked her to join her in Holosuite Five after the end of ( Read more... )
Word Count: 539
Rating: General
Original/Fandom: Star Trek: DS9
Pairings (if any):Kira Nerys, Jadzia Dax
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): None
Summary: A gift from Jadzia
Link: The door slowly slid shut behind as Kira Nerys stepped into the holosuite. Jadzia Dax had asked her to join her in Holosuite Five after the end of ( Read more... )
Comments 1
I really love the concept of this. Jadzia helping Nerys loosen up and giving her the gift of her home planet as it should be rather than how it is. Your imagery is gorgeous.
One thing I noticed was that some of the sentences were short and choppy and didn't flow quite as well as they could have, particularly in the first paragraph. Also the transition to Jadzia and Kira in the holosuite to them leaving. Did they get called to the bridge? Was it just time for their shift? A little detail on that would have made their having to leave more clear.
I like this little slice of DS9!
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