A smirk flirts across his mouth, but quickly vanishes in the face of her obvious distress. “Well,” he drops to his knees at her feet, sets his elbows on the arms of the chair, “it’s not as if you’ve spent much time with good ol’ Donut, lately, have you?” he murmurs seductively.
Mmmmmmmm. Is is suddenly hotter in here? ;D For real, what does Veronica want with Donut anyway? I just love the description here, and what he does, the way he wins her over from all of her Donut pouting, guuuh.
“He’s my son, and he does what I tell him to. Do you understand me?”
I know when we were talking earlier you said that when you write you wait for the characters to speak to you, and dude, I can hear Aaron's voice in my head in the part where he grabs Veronica. It's so right, it's scary, with all the rrrrs when he says her name. Because Aaron really did that and man it was creepy, the way her rolled her name around and everything else he said.
Looking up into his stormy, confused eyes, she impulsively rises on tiptoe and gently kisses his cheek. “You shouldn’t be alone,” she murmurs, pressing her face to his.
Something about this bit, I just get a beautiful visual of long haired Veronica doing this, comforting him. It's so sweet.
I still can't really see Logan going to the Holiday Inn Express of his own violation, but I just love your descriptions of the room. The spartan style, the Ikea like furniture, the print on the bedspread, you always set the scene so perfectly, no matter if it's some place gorgeous like Paris, or the middle of nowhere N.C. or the streets of Chicago.
She responds eagerly, slipping her tongue into his mouth. He can feel her pert nipples pressing against his chest, her heart beating. Suddenly, he realizes he wants her more than he’s ever wanted a girl.
Logan is sooo seductive, isn't he? Gah - I love writing him trying to win her over, over and over.... Hee! I think that's what's so fun about this universe - he's not quite the OPJ he becomes, but he already has the sauve, slinky charm we love about him.
My reasoning for the Holiday Inn Express is that: a) they needed to leave Neptune, cuz I wouldn't put it past Aaron to go looking for the Xterra; b) they're only 15, and trying to stay incognito, under the radar - and who'd be looking for them at the Express; c) a big, middle class, impersonal hotel would be a more logical choice if you're trying to hide; and, finally, d) I didn't want to put them in a really luxurious room because Veronica was already going to be a little overwhelmed by the situaiton, and somewhere like the Grand might have spooked her too much. I understand we're all used to Logan using his money to surround himself in luxury, but he's not yet that Logan, so it made sense to me. ;D I'm glad you liked the room I sent them to, and thanks for the lovely words about setting the scene - it's always part of the story, for me.
And thank you for being a great sounding board, chica *winks* I love discussing my choices, and I loved that you challenged some of them. It helps more than you realize!
Mmmmmmmm. Is is suddenly hotter in here? ;D For real, what does Veronica want with Donut anyway? I just love the description here, and what he does, the way he wins her over from all of her Donut pouting, guuuh.
“He’s my son, and he does what I tell him to. Do you understand me?”
I know when we were talking earlier you said that when you write you wait for the characters to speak to you, and dude, I can hear Aaron's voice in my head in the part where he grabs Veronica. It's so right, it's scary, with all the rrrrs when he says her name. Because Aaron really did that and man it was creepy, the way her rolled her name around and everything else he said.
Looking up into his stormy, confused eyes, she impulsively rises on tiptoe and gently kisses his cheek. “You shouldn’t be alone,” she murmurs, pressing her face to his.
Something about this bit, I just get a beautiful visual of long haired Veronica doing this, comforting him. It's so sweet.
I still can't really see Logan going to the Holiday Inn Express of his own violation, but I just love your descriptions of the room. The spartan style, the Ikea like furniture, the print on the bedspread, you always set the scene so perfectly, no matter if it's some place gorgeous like Paris, or the middle of nowhere N.C. or the streets of Chicago.
She responds eagerly, slipping her tongue into his mouth. He can feel her pert nipples pressing against his chest, her heart beating. Suddenly, he realizes he wants her more than he’s ever wanted a girl.
HOT DAMN. Whew. next part!
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My reasoning for the Holiday Inn Express is that: a) they needed to leave Neptune, cuz I wouldn't put it past Aaron to go looking for the Xterra; b) they're only 15, and trying to stay incognito, under the radar - and who'd be looking for them at the Express; c) a big, middle class, impersonal hotel would be a more logical choice if you're trying to hide; and, finally, d) I didn't want to put them in a really luxurious room because Veronica was already going to be a little overwhelmed by the situaiton, and somewhere like the Grand might have spooked her too much. I understand we're all used to Logan using his money to surround himself in luxury, but he's not yet that Logan, so it made sense to me. ;D I'm glad you liked the room I sent them to, and thanks for the lovely words about setting the scene - it's always part of the story, for me.
And thank you for being a great sounding board, chica *winks* I love discussing my choices, and I loved that you challenged some of them. It helps more than you realize!
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