This is brilliant. Young!Jayne with the flare and the protectiveness and his brutal honesty; and the 'making him more than that'... I cannot wait to read more of this! Excellent, excellent job.
And I love how you've written Mama Cobb here. So divided on having to give up her son, but wanting something more for him too. So well done.
i adore this! so glad you're writing this! i look forward to the development of jayne at the companion house.....seems its gonna be all sorts of intriging! More please!!!!!!!! TTFN :D
It is always worth the wait for you come out with a story, whether a one off like "Ain't no Soldier" or the Turtle remix, or as part of a series, like this one. Your work is always so complete, so easy to read and picture. I always find that there is just enough description so that the audience can visualize the scene and can get a sense as to what everyone is thinking stopping, stopping well short of having to smack us upside the head and tell us in precise words what everyone is thinking and feeling.
Anyhow, I hope that makes sense. To me that your writing is very clean and simple, with a bit of an edge to make the reader want more. And I really enjoy reading your stories.
Thanks for posting your fic, and I hope you keep on doing it.
I loved this! Young!Jayne was spot-on! His protectiveness and rebellion! And Mama Cobb wanting to give him a better life, but being understandably upset about it *sigh*, just so very wonderful.
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This is brilliant. Young!Jayne with the flare and the protectiveness and his brutal honesty; and the 'making him more than that'... I cannot wait to read more of this! Excellent, excellent job.
And I love how you've written Mama Cobb here. So divided on having to give up her son, but wanting something more for him too. So well done.
More soon?
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Thank you. I had such a hard time with this, I'm so relieved that I was able to get Mama Cobb's heartbreak to come through.
I have ideas...so there's plenty more to come. It's just a matter of getting them typed up.
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Anyhow, I hope that makes sense. To me that your writing is very clean and simple, with a bit of an edge to make the reader want more. And I really enjoy reading your stories.
Thanks for posting your fic, and I hope you keep on doing it.
Cheers,
--Pauline
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I loved this! Young!Jayne was spot-on! His protectiveness and rebellion! And Mama Cobb wanting to give him a better life, but being understandably upset about it *sigh*, just so very wonderful.
Can't wait for another installment!
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I'm glad you liked it! I haven't gotten much response really on this.
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