Comment on Timb's poem
19 May 2007 @ 11:15 pm
3 Poems
Timb, I enjoyed your poem Neon Sign. The imagery is very strong and you have a clear emotional attachment forged from years of constructing memories in the area. I love the concept of the light coming on at dusk at first hesitant in the cold but building strength. The light is reliable like the working people, companionable to the late night revelors in the town.
“And all around it
A million candles are lit
The blossoming lights, night-time flowers of these suburbs
A carpet that sweeps through this valley
And burns till late”
Its very moving, very beautiful and shows an honesty of emotion that you were unlikly to express as well in any other medium.
rhanihf
2007-05-25 12:00 pm UTC ( link)
Comment Posted SuccessfullyOh I just saw the cat photo........
I really think you should continue working in a poetry form.
Though I disagree with you about Nest of Winds; National Trust and Neon Sign are far better, more resolved pieces. Leave Nest of Winds for a couple of weeks and then go back to it, it feels a little forced like you stuggled with it in some places. Its like you and this poem are not really ready to meet and form a complete understanding yet, not far away though. Truely very close to brilliance.