Fic 5: Acceptance 3a/3

[rgcraeg]

"Hey, Sam," Jack tried through the dim shadows of their bedroom. "Are you awake?"

Rolling to her side, Sam glanced at the notepad on his lap. "How far are you?" Her hair was as flat as her tone. She struggled a minute with the blankets, which he was sitting on top of, oblivious to her distress. "Jack," she warned, "move."

Jack's eyes lifted

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[thothmes]

Yep, that's our Jack. Able to navigate around the trackless wastes of alien planets, but lost and a bit helpless in an elementary school. And of course he sweats bullets in situations where he might let one of the very short list of people he lets into his inner circle down. He doesn't care what most people think of him, but those select few can cut him to the bone if he loses their regard.

This story started on the note that the boy was the different one, the one who had trouble reaching his father. I hope we'll get to see just how this speech strengthens his bond with his father (maybe by being the only one in the room who "gets" that his dad the galactic hero is scared now, but carrying on for his sake? Maybe by something as simple seeing Jack relax when he catches sight of the boy? Maybe by watching Jack give one of his out-of-left field speeches, and still warm up the room, so that he realizes that different ["You'll find he's not like other people!"] can in fact be a good thing?) I'm sure you have your own ideas about which way to go with this.

On a purely housekeeping note, I think you meant that Jack confessed his apprehension, not he's apprehension. I hate that kind of error, because when you scan through for it before posting, it is impossible to see sometimes because the error consists of a valid word in an invalid place, and it just doesn't stand out.

[rgcraeg]

Oh yes, you have pegged Jack very well and it is particularly relevant to what I am saying with this piece.

As for the speech. Ugh, I really have no clue what I want him to say, in fact it is likely I will write it and rewrite it a hundred times before I get 'the one'. And I really might use the idea of Jack relaxing when he catches a glimpse of the boy, maybe with a look of awe on his face...something he's seen in Carter when she's impressed by his knowledge (something, not sure if you've noticed, he only seems to share with her. Then when Daniel and/or Teal'c are around, he's back to dumb leader, give-me-the-bottom-line-before-I-slap-you-in-the-face sort of attitude). Hmm, interesting, I'll try some tomorrow--er, later today :).

Thanks for the good eye! I blew past that, didn't even notice! Course I actually edited that part right in the posting window, so I didn't read it over first, oops.

Thanks for the feedback, it helps a ton :D.