FIC: Falter (Atobe + Tezuka not-quite-gen, Gish)

[reposte]

Title: Falter
Author: Ociwen
Wordcount: 3000
Rating: Gish
Disclaimer: Konomi owns all, but the musicals exploit it.
Summary: Tezuka's going to go pro. Atobe's left behind.
Author's Notes: Not quite sure what this is. Post-Nationals. Dai-chan!Tezuka and Inoue!Atobe rock my tennis socks.

Comments

[mayezinha]

What a miserable day. Rainy days are awful. ^^;;
And more when you stalk people. This shows how Atobe can't win against nature, and how he can be as clueless about the most simple things.

Gravitation? For real?

Also, I loved Tezuka's family. In the inside he's such a softie.

Of course this is going sideways, but the perspective of it makes me happy:
He could be at Sanada's samurai cave in the middle of Kanagawa.

The last line just let me speechless. Probably Atobe was too.

Thanks for sharing this one!

[reposoir]

Gravitation + Tezuka is canon. I did not make that up.

If it's possible to make Atobe speechless, Tezuka would be the one.

Thank you so much, Maye! I was very hesitant to post this fic--so your words really mean a lot to me, as always :)

[venivincere]

EEEEEEEEE! I love this! Atobe, such an ass in his uncertainty. I love the whining-to-himself flailing and I love Tezuka, just himself, pulling the worthwhile opponent along with him with "I thought you knew German?" Subtle and delicious, this one. And soggy. :-D Lovelywork!

[reposoir]

ありがとうござい増しヴェニさん！！

Thank you so much, Veni! I'm so glad that you liked this--even with an Atobe who wasn't all certain! It worried me that it might be OOC, maybe? &hearts

[doovlynsidhe]

Oh Atobe.

I love how you wrote the dynamic between the two of them - Atobe chasing after Tezuka but not realizing he doesn't have to...

You're descriptions are beautiful as always. I could feel the damp heat that comes with a late summer storm just by reading this! A wonderful little ficlet. : -D

[reposoir]

!! Thank you so much!!! Your words make me wibble, like always! And I'm so pleased that you liked this and the descriptions, too! ^-^

[jongina]

He could be at Sanada's samurai cave in the middle of Kanagawa.

That line was KILLER. XD

I love this as a whole. Atobe is a rather feisty boy, isn't he? ^^♥

[reposoir]

Thank you so much!

(Atobe is a perfect excuse to make Sanada jokes ;)

[mnemo_syne]

I love your style. I think every sentence was perfect. This was a great read, thank you.

[reposoir]

Aw, thank you so very much for the kind words! ^-^