pause, shift, go (I yield to you) [Johnny's Entertainment; Matsumoto Jun/Kamenashi Kazuya]

[addison_rock]

Title: pause, shift, go (I yield to you)
Author: xplodey_di
Summary: Falling in love is a little like falling apart.
Rating: PG
Fandom: Johnny's Entertainment
Spoilers and/or Warnings: (if applicable): none, really.
Title, Author and URL of original story: Yielding, by solesakuma
Note: Thank you to usomitai for helping me - I didn't end up posting the other one, but I am

Comments

[solesakuma]

First: Wow.
Second: I have no idea about how to comment on a remix of my story, but I'll try.
Third:I absolutely adore this! I enjoy the prose and the dynamic between the two of them, because that's exactly how I see them and I'm glad you agreed with me.
I like the fact that you kept some of the parenthesis and changed their meanings. :D
So... AWESOME WORK.
Fourth: I still think this sounded weird. Sorry. >.<

[solesakuma]

I'm still all O_O you picked this one to remix, though. I was like '... So he picks the weird 2nd person POV? Wow. She must be crazy!'. XP

*reads beta note* Way to make me curious. >.

[solesakuma]

BTW, you kinda forgot to change the author. :O

[shayheyred]

I was delighted to find some of my favorite "characters" written here - and the story was wonderful and delightful and yay for 2nd person POV. Really well done.