sound familiar?

[relyonluv]

So my mom comes in my bedroom and randomly mentions "last night i set out the coon trap and put some cat^food in it, and i caught kitty," and then she walks out.

better? --->

we real cool. we
left school. we

lurk late. we
strike straight. we

sing sin. we
thin gin. we

jazz june. we
die soon ~ G. Brooks

my version:

we real strong. we
wear thong. we

lift weights. we
get dates. we

look good. we
just could. we

take drugs. we
be thugs.