TBH, as my kids now say out loud *sigh*, the ending felt natural to me. If she didn't get squashed, she would be happy and grateful, etc, etc. My preference would actually have been for a bit more detail on the front end, such as how she knew the dude was a "monster," and maybe what he was doing to the other girl.
Doctor's office? Nothing serious I hope!
Funny thing where endings are concerned, I originally wrote my story so that the hedge had been cut down when James arrived at the house. The punch to the gut was great, but it would've made the ending suck, so I relented and let it live. *grin* The symbolism of James taking a cut branch of the hedge to his sister's hospital bed was nice, but I still mourn the loss of that punch to the gut when he discovers that yes the house is still there, but the hedge isn't. Ah well.
I don't friend people I don't like. *smile* Well, not for long anyway. You've been a welcome addition to my Flist, and a fun person to talk with.
I said so in my answer to your message, but I'll repeat it here, happy holidays to you and your family as well. May you travel safe, eat well, and never miss another LJI deadline. *grin*
Doctor's office? Nothing serious I hope!
Funny thing where endings are concerned, I originally wrote my story so that the hedge had been cut down when James arrived at the house. The punch to the gut was great, but it would've made the ending suck, so I relented and let it live. *grin* The symbolism of James taking a cut branch of the hedge to his sister's hospital bed was nice, but I still mourn the loss of that punch to the gut when he discovers that yes the house is still there, but the hedge isn't. Ah well.
I don't friend people I don't like. *smile* Well, not for long anyway. You've been a welcome addition to my Flist, and a fun person to talk with.
I said so in my answer to your message, but I'll repeat it here, happy holidays to you and your family as well. May you travel safe, eat well, and never miss another LJI deadline. *grin*
Best,
Dan
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