HMD I may make few mistakes since I just started playing this kid. If I did something wrong, please don't hesitate to comment. All comment are screened.
First, thanks for showing an interest in Route 29. We love having more characters around. I'm either a part of your cast now or a future castmate, but I'm throwing this in here on a sock because I... really am not good at wording things and I don't want any offense I accidentally cause to be linked to my name.
First a question: Is English your native language? Because to be honest, we haven't seen a single tag you've posted that's had proper grammar or word choice, and a few of them we couldn't even figure out if we thought about it. (Just as an example: even in this HMD post, you said "All comment is screened." You mean either "all comments are screened" or "all commenting is screened".)
But I know that everyone starts somewhere, as far as speaking another language goes, so that in itself could be worked through if your Lloyd were good.
But sweetie, your Lloyd... He doesn't feel like Lloyd at all to us. (I've been speaking with a couple of other muns about it.) He feels flat in general, while Lloyd always has an energy about him. Plus... I don't know how to put it besides that nearly every piece of characterization we've seen has been off somehow.
As a couple of examples: -- He told Heather that his Dex said to be the best pokemon trainer, and "Well, I'm not aiming for that way, and I don't even think about it." Grammar/wording issues aside, Lloyd may be a hero, but he's a child at heart. He would see this, this world of adventure and pokemon, and he'd be thrilled. He'd be all, "YES, I WANT TO BE THE BEST. WE CAN DO IT, CAN'T WE, CHARMY?" All enthusiastic and grinning. (Okay, minus the capslocking, but you see what I mean?) -- Your Lloyd uses very big words. "Unusual circumstances, huh?" He said that to Kratos. Lloyd wouldn't say that at all, not unless he was trying to pretend to be Raine for a minute. He'd say something more like... "Heh, this is pretty weird, isn't it?" -- He forgave Kratos in the game. This is made very obvious to the viewers. Your Lloyd blatantly and offhandedly told Kratos he doesn't trust him. This is very out of character.
Those are just a few of the things off the top of my head.
I really don't know what to suggest you do to fix him. It just... to me seems like there's way too much going wrong to get it right without a lot of practice, but feel free to prove me wrong. :)
Thanks for telling me this. I realized this, since I started my first post. Actually, English isn't my native language because I lived in southeast Asia. And that's not all. I think I apped him about a month ago and got accepted two weeks later. During that two week, I'm having bad in RL and holidays in Singapore without surfing the net. That's why I act him a bit off. So I would like to apologize to you and other muns for my mistake.
About the example you described to me: - The first one is actually a part of my plan. What will happen to them if they're in Pokemon World without knowing what is Pokemon? Lloyd doesn't know about Pokemon and the goal of being a Pokemon Trainer. I make him slowly to understand the purpose being a Pokemon Trainer, so it takes awhile ^^; - That's my mistake. I used to watch him in Jap Version. But I guess it didn't work. I'll check him again on how he speaks. (Srsly, I got nervous when speaking with Kratos DX) - Did I mention he's in different timeline? I took him during his first time returning Sylvarant from Otherworldly Gate, and I'm pretty sure that time Lloyd not yet trusted Kratos, and also not knowing that he is Lloyd's father.
I try to fix him again in his second post. Since it's my first time playing him, I would like to get some words of advices and more experience on playing as him. Feel free to drop by a comment again, I'd really appreciate it.
First, thanks for showing an interest in Route 29. We love having more characters around. I'm either a part of your cast now or a future castmate, but I'm throwing this in here on a sock because I... really am not good at wording things and I don't want any offense I accidentally cause to be linked to my name.
First a question: Is English your native language? Because to be honest, we haven't seen a single tag you've posted that's had proper grammar or word choice, and a few of them we couldn't even figure out if we thought about it. (Just as an example: even in this HMD post, you said "All comment is screened." You mean either "all comments are screened" or "all commenting is screened".)
But I know that everyone starts somewhere, as far as speaking another language goes, so that in itself could be worked through if your Lloyd were good.
But sweetie, your Lloyd... He doesn't feel like Lloyd at all to us. (I've been speaking with a couple of other muns about it.) He feels flat in general, while Lloyd always has an energy about him. Plus... I don't know how to put it besides that nearly every piece of characterization we've seen has been off somehow.
As a couple of examples:
-- He told Heather that his Dex said to be the best pokemon trainer, and "Well, I'm not aiming for that way, and I don't even think about it." Grammar/wording issues aside, Lloyd may be a hero, but he's a child at heart. He would see this, this world of adventure and pokemon, and he'd be thrilled. He'd be all, "YES, I WANT TO BE THE BEST. WE CAN DO IT, CAN'T WE, CHARMY?" All enthusiastic and grinning. (Okay, minus the capslocking, but you see what I mean?)
-- Your Lloyd uses very big words. "Unusual circumstances, huh?" He said that to Kratos. Lloyd wouldn't say that at all, not unless he was trying to pretend to be Raine for a minute. He'd say something more like... "Heh, this is pretty weird, isn't it?"
-- He forgave Kratos in the game. This is made very obvious to the viewers. Your Lloyd blatantly and offhandedly told Kratos he doesn't trust him. This is very out of character.
Those are just a few of the things off the top of my head.
I really don't know what to suggest you do to fix him. It just... to me seems like there's way too much going wrong to get it right without a lot of practice, but feel free to prove me wrong. :)
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About the example you described to me:
- The first one is actually a part of my plan. What will happen to them if they're in Pokemon World without knowing what is Pokemon? Lloyd doesn't know about Pokemon and the goal of being a Pokemon Trainer. I make him slowly to understand the purpose being a Pokemon Trainer, so it takes awhile ^^;
- That's my mistake. I used to watch him in Jap Version. But I guess it didn't work. I'll check him again on how he speaks. (Srsly, I got nervous when speaking with Kratos DX)
- Did I mention he's in different timeline? I took him during his first time returning Sylvarant from Otherworldly Gate, and I'm pretty sure that time Lloyd not yet trusted Kratos, and also not knowing that he is Lloyd's father.
I try to fix him again in his second post. Since it's my first time playing him, I would like to get some words of advices and more experience on playing as him. Feel free to drop by a comment again, I'd really appreciate it.
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