Japanese Presentation.. rough script

[redeim]

Just posting this to get some help from my Japanese speaking buddies Alohdark. >.>
だいすき Aloh-せんぱい! <3333333
I clarified what I (believe I) already knew for you... :3b

The questions and requirements:

1. あなたのしゅっしんちはどこですか。　Asking where my hometown is. 5pts.

2. どんな町ですか。What kind of town is it? (2 Adjectives) 5 pts.

3. 何で有名ですか。What is your town famous for? 5

Comments

[alohdark]

I'm going to go line by line, okay? ^^ If you have any questions, ask me.

あなたのしゅっしんちわマウンタインビューです。
Here you don't use "あなた" since that means "you" Just use "私"
Also, if your handing this in, remember to use "は" and not "わ" when it's a particle.

小さいとしずか町です。
That's right as it is, but there's another way to say that. I don't know if you've learned this grammar yet, or not, so you can ignore this if you haven't, but in my mind that sounds better as "小さくてしずか町です。"

レストランで有名です。
有名（な）レストランがあります。
(i'm not 100% sure if you need the na or not there...)

春はあたたかいお天気です。およぎます。(I go swimming???)
"およぎます" literally means swim but　"およぎに行く" means to go swim

夏は暑いお天気です。　うちにいます。
First part is fine, but I'd use ”家を出ません" for the second part.

秋は風お天気です。でも、あたたかいおてんきです。スポツことをします。
Hmm, I don't think you can use "風" like that, but my weather knowledge isn't as good as it should be. I'd rather say "秋もあたたかいお天気です" For the second part, I'm not sure if you need "koto" there. Either way, it works, I think.

冬はさむいお天気です。雨はふゆです。　テレビと本ことをします。(I'm trying to say I

[redeim]

now explain your kanji to me... ;^; XD;;;

mm~ It was late... I knew it was "watashi"... v.v;;;

arigatou gozaimasu AGAIN for all your help. <333

[alohdark]

四季節 - yon kisetsu
家 - uchi