The Potion

[kerrymdb]

Title: The Potion
Author: kerrymdb
Summary: She just needed to drink the potion and it would be all over.
Rating: T
Word Count: 2,945
Author’s Note: The prompts were "Search and Destroy" by The Stooge, First mistake and Envy. Envy didn't get worked into the fic nearly as much as I originally planned. In fact…you might need to get out a magnifying

Comments

[bratanimus]

Oh, wow, I really liked this. You really captured all the tension and trepidation of Lily's journey, starting with her buying the ingredients at different shops (and I think Snape knows exactly what they're for - after all, there must have been many women who refused to bring a child into a world at war). The temperature in the flat really added to the tension. And her thoughts scurrying from one rationale to the next just carried the piece along.

I thought the scene with Remus was fabulous. The fact that he initially thought James knew and blamed him for not being there with her says that he has no judgment for people who made that decision, especially at wartime. But when he finds out that James doesn't know, he very justly reminds Lily that the engagement ring on her finger is a reminder of a promise of partnership with James. It's the only real arguement he gives to her, but it's so true. And then he vows to stay with her so she doesn't have to go through it alone. What a friend. And the hug at the end, when she finally surrenders and allows herself to collapse a little bit, was just beautiful.

The psychological and emotional journey Lily travels in this is absolutely lovely and very well-crafted. Just perfect. I really did love this. :D

[kerrymdb]

Thank you! I'm so pleased that you liked it! For some reason, Lily seems to me like one that doesn't want anyone knowing her personal business (except for close friends) so the thought of anyone figuring out what she was trying to brew (especially Snape!) would be mortifying.

The fact that he initially thought James knew and blamed him for not being there with her says that he has no judgment for people who made that decision?
Remus always seems like the type that wouldn't allow himself to be judgemental. Might even consider it hypocrisy. And I think Remus had to stay with Lily if she took the potion. After all, he does know that having a friend during his transformation makes them easier.

Thank you for your comments! I really appreciate them! :)