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[bratanimus]

Title: Nothing But Fighting
Author: bratanimus
Summary: Remus/Lily, set during their sixth year at Hogwarts. Merlin, why hadn’t James told him how much fun fighting with Lily was?
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Language
Word Count: 4128
Author’s Note: My prompts were the Decemberists’ song, first fight, and lust. The fic doesn’t really have anything to do with the

Comments

[lady_bracknell]

This is really great. I love the idea of them duelling partly for practice and partly for release - and I just loved this line: It wasn’t about who won here. It was about who lost, and what that might mean in the real world.

It seemed to sum up very much what it's like for them, on the cusp of being thrust into a world where they could face death at a startlingly young age, and yet there's something quite teenage, too, about the idea of them meeting in secret, wanting a world of their own to retreat to, with their own rules. I agree with others, too, that the idea of Remus being the one to broker the deal, as it were, is perfect, since he always struck me as the one who's not as attached to the idea of his little exclusive group as the others.

Loved the Remus/Lily interaction, how equal they were, and Remus' glorious moment of epiphany about how he feels and how it's come at a quite inconvenient time. I'd love to see more on this idea, where Remus and Lily go next.

My absolute favourite bit of this, though, was how you expressed the characterisation of all the Marauders through their fighting style - Sirius and James all flair and fanciness (Sirius' spell was priceless), Peter sneaky and underhand, and Remus with his infamous control. That was all so very, very apt.

I really loved this :D.

[bratanimus]

and I just loved this line: It wasn’t about who won here. It was about who lost, and what that might mean in the real world.

You know, I started typing that line and didn't realize where it was going until I reached the period. Then I said, "Whoa." :O Every once in a while something comes straight from your subconscious, and it's pretty cool when that happens.

he always struck me as the one who's not as attached to the idea of his little exclusive group as the others.

I agree. And I think that would certainly encourage suspicion in the others later (with Peter's help), especially if Remus has been known to negotiate with Slytherins.

I'd love to see more on this idea, where Remus and Lily go next.

I'm hoping to write another chapter or two, if I can finish some other plot bunnies first. Oh, and then there's A Star Danced, the next chapter of which I still haven't finished. ;)

I'm glad you like the characterization of MWPP through their fighting style. I enjoyed thinking about what they mght be like. I figured Lily, in particular, would be rather fierce and would give Remus a run for his money. When he says (about Sirius), "He needs a challenge," I think he's talking about himself just as much. So I imagine that Lily is part of the reason Remus becomes a superlative dueler later on. Gah, I really need to write more on this. :D

Thank you for such a lovely review! I'm very glad you liked it. :)