Re: Very nice!realelvishMarch 5 2007, 00:10:06 UTC
I liked this story very much. Interesting concept! The opening scene reminded me of Anne Rice's Rameses the Damned, just a bit.
Thanks! I've never read Rameses the Damned. I stopped reading her stuff when she fired her editor.
Obsessive compulsive me wanted to know how 'Alex' got into Lord Clarford's coffin in the first place. Hed they ordered it from a dealer of antiquities or what?
You asked, and Alex/Ishanata answered.
You write as if you know sheep very well.
I grew up on a sheep ranch in Montana, so I'm pretty familiar with those annoying little buggers. Yes, I am guilty of jumping into piles of wool as well. I bet it's nicer than any goose feather mattress.
I had one or two unimportant picks. Did you mean for the POV shifts directly from 'Alex' to others? If so, just ignore me. :)
The POV is 3rd person omniscient, and I found that Alex's awakening works best from his POV, and sets up the re-awakening at the end up the best. There's only one scene that I left Alex's awakening in Marianne's POV: when they pull Alex from the river. That one was during an emotional climax for Marianne, so it had to be from her POV.
And sent for a coffin with teak sides From India, no cost they shied, The casket had a trail of flies.
*snort* That took care of it nicely.
Thanks! I've never read Rameses the Damned. I stopped reading her stuff when she fired her editor.
Rameses the Damned is an older one, done before the unfortunate decision by Ms. Rice to fire her editor. She said the saga would be continued, but it has not. Too bad, because I enjoyed it far more than her tiresome vampires.
I'm afraid there was something in Memnoch the Devil that managed to offend even this agnostic (that takes some doing!) and I jumped the Rice ship. I still recommend some of her earliest work. The Feast of All Saints is one of my favorites.
The POV is 3rd person omniscient, and I found that Alex's awakening works best from his POV, and sets up the re-awakening at the end up the best. There's only one scene that I left Alex's awakening in Marianne's POV: when they pull Alex from the river. That one was during an emotional climax for Marianne, so it had to be from her POV.
Then there's obviously a good reason for it, so ignore me. :)
You have great courage to attempt the third person omniscient, though. Whenever I've tried it, or done it without meaning to (and that would be only from character to narrator rather than a POV switch between characters) my writer's group opens a big ol' can of Whup-a$$ on me. But you're right -- sometimes you just have to.
Thanks! I've never read Rameses the Damned. I stopped reading her stuff when she fired her editor.
Obsessive compulsive me wanted to know how 'Alex' got into Lord Clarford's coffin in the first place. Hed they ordered it from a dealer of antiquities or what?
You asked, and Alex/Ishanata answered.
You write as if you know sheep very well.
I grew up on a sheep ranch in Montana, so I'm pretty familiar with those annoying little buggers. Yes, I am guilty of jumping into piles of wool as well. I bet it's nicer than any goose feather mattress.
I had one or two unimportant picks. Did you mean for the POV shifts directly from 'Alex' to others? If so, just ignore me. :)
The POV is 3rd person omniscient, and I found that Alex's awakening works best from his POV, and sets up the re-awakening at the end up the best. There's only one scene that I left Alex's awakening in Marianne's POV: when they pull Alex from the river. That one was during an emotional climax for Marianne, so it had to be from her POV.
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From India, no cost they shied,
The casket had a trail of flies.
*snort* That took care of it nicely.
Thanks! I've never read Rameses the Damned. I stopped reading her stuff when she fired her editor.
Rameses the Damned is an older one, done before the unfortunate decision by Ms. Rice to fire her editor. She said the saga would be continued, but it has not. Too bad, because I enjoyed it far more than her tiresome vampires.
I'm afraid there was something in Memnoch the Devil that managed to offend even this agnostic (that takes some doing!) and I jumped the Rice ship. I still recommend some of her earliest work. The Feast of All Saints is one of my favorites.
The POV is 3rd person omniscient, and I found that Alex's awakening works best from his POV, and sets up the re-awakening at the end up the best. There's only one scene that I left Alex's awakening in Marianne's POV: when they pull Alex from the river. That one was during an emotional climax for Marianne, so it had to be from her POV.
Then there's obviously a good reason for it, so ignore me. :)
You have great courage to attempt the third person omniscient, though. Whenever I've tried it, or done it without meaning to (and that would be only from character to narrator rather than a POV switch between characters) my writer's group opens a big ol' can of Whup-a$$ on me. But you're right -- sometimes you just have to.
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