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[readingredhead]

So I have to write another exercise for Creative Writing, to be posted by today.  I don't like this one as much as I like last week's.  I think the problem is that these ideas always come to me as part of whatever story I'm currently obsessing over.  At the moment, that's my planned NaNo-novel, the beauty and the beast retelling.  So Noelle makes

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[incaseineedyou]

It doesn't have to be new and revolutionary to be good. And also the best developments of characters aren't always radical or revolutionary. The subtlety can be good, both in the facets of the characters themselves and in the delivery (or, I guess, expression- you're not acting).
I know exactly what you mean about showing as opposed to telling, and I like it. You got that down here.
I have read a lot of retellings of it various places. The one I told you about is one of my favorite because it turns it around a little. Or kinda a lot. I don't want to ruin it, but I really want to get it to you. Haha.

Hm. Well, I definitely share the need for approval. But my analysis will tell you how I hide it by rejecting penises (penii?) all together, because of my fright at their obvious dominance and superiority. Okay, I don't really reject them all together, but for the sake of Freud's theory that women only react one of three ways to their realization that they will always be lacking (literally), I will classify myself as a lesbian for this analysis.
Now we just need a woman who handles her deficiency by becoming a dominatrix of sorts and flaunting the fact that she in no way needs approval (she’s lying, of course. The only reason her husband is the weaker one is because he had no father and didn’t learn to be a man in trying to win his mother’s heart). Once we get her, we’ll have the whole set. I hear it goes for quite a bit on ebay.

I think I love us.

[readingredhead]

I read a Beauty and the Beast retelling in a collection called "Kissing the Witch" that Rebecca (the roommate) has. All of the stories in it are vaguely lesbian, if you want to read them that way (which is the intent). For instance, the beast turns out to be a woman, though Beauty initially assumes it's a man. It was certainly different!

I'll definitely have to read the one you keep talking about. Francesca Lia Block, right? I might have to look for a copy around here...

Your analysis already makes me laugh. We really do need a set -- if we could pull that off we could make millions on ebay! I'd only be worried about who would buy us... *awkward*

For the record, I know I love us. :)

[incaseineedyou]

I think I've heard of it, and intended to buy it at one point. I think there's one where Cinderella runs away with her fairy godmother or something like that? Haha. If not, then that's a different book of vague lesbian fairytales, in which case my bad. I meant to read it, but never did. If it sounds weird that I've hear about it, I freak out when I don't understand things. Especially in relation to me. So in ninth grade when I thought I was going to hell, I looked up every book I could find and read all of them I could get my hands on. Anyway. Your roommate sounds cool.

I'll bring it to you. Or I could mail it to you, I really don't mind paying the postage, but my ex has it. Scratch that, my friend has it. That's the more important label of the two.

Highly awkward. But very very funny. We could probably get our own reality show, at the very least.

Okay fine, just out do me. Psh.

[incaseineedyou]

Ha, I got one. I love that I love us.
Beat that :)