Can't talk long as I've got a visitor but I really liked this. The interplay between the characters is just perfect and, having seen all of the show, i know that there's a bit coming up that you'll just *love*. My favorite line is...
"Teasing that could send Ed into a bloodrage if it came from anyone else was just a harmless joke when it came from Al -- sometimes Winry envied that privilege."
That is so true and so sweet. I wish I had more time to say how much I liked this, and the logic within it, but i've got to go. Oh, but I am glad you've seen the flame vs Fullmetal episode... means I can write down that other little story idea I had... :giggles insanely:.
Ok, got a bit more time now so I can dwell on it a little more. I love the way you wrote Edward, I could very much hear his voice in this. Wrinry was excellent too, her sadness and her emotional resonece was about right. I get this kind of imrpession of her as a person too. The grandmother was also well written, you seem to have that down about right. I also liked the way you reminded us how good Al was at the written test. That was nicely worked in. Some writres in this fandom, (and I can't claim to be an expert, I've only read a few FMA stories,) make all a bit whimpy. You didn't do that. The banter with Ed was a delight to read and I could very much picture that happening within the show. I loved Ed's snarky replies too, I like how that guy is so driven and independent. So resistent to almost all authority figures, it seems. He's a really cool character. But anyway, I wish I could say more, but I seem to have run out of words once more.
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"Teasing that could send Ed into a bloodrage if it came from anyone else was just a harmless joke when it came from Al -- sometimes Winry envied that privilege."
That is so true and so sweet. I wish I had more time to say how much I liked this, and the logic within it, but i've got to go. Oh, but I am glad you've seen the flame vs Fullmetal episode... means I can write down that other little story idea I had... :giggles insanely:.
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But anyway, I wish I could say more, but I seem to have run out of words once more.
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