Bah!

[rasspudin]

I think Im going to start posting my short stories for class on here so people can help me revise them. Enjoy

Comments

[galaxysown]

Wow, I like it.

I dunno how you could revise it to make it better, let me think about it, I'll get back to you on that one.

This is my favorite kind of story though, written in first person, where it could be anyone telling the story, because they aren't actually a part of the main action.

Genius my friend,..........genius...........

[slave4kitten]

That was well-written.
First person is very pretty.