Comments | rallamajoop: Kingdom Hearts fic

rallamajoop

Kingdom Hearts fic

Aug 09, 2006 20:23

Uh, I may have mentioned I was writing KHII fic ( Read more... )

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rubyd August 13 2006, 16:16:10 UTC

I really like the way you write, and the phrases you use. There's a rhythym to it, and feels very dream-like, peeking at how much the three of them have forgotten and what they remember.

rallamajoop August 14 2006, 02:14:55 UTC

Thanks! Dream sequences are one of those plot devices that are so easy to overuse that it's great to hear they worked here.

Out of curiousity, same rubyd from devart, right? I remember my sister faved your "Oops" pic a while back.. and a couple of others too ^^; Really cute stuff, we loved it.

rubyd August 14 2006, 03:17:01 UTC

I like dream sequences XD;

And yup, the one and the same. Thank you! :D

kangaroop August 13 2006, 17:57:36 UTC

What a beautiful story!

I love fill-in-the-gap fanfics (aka what wasn't seen in the game) and yours is one of the best ones I've read. It has a nice flow and the way you described the dreams is believable (after all, dreams don't follow logic, space or time).

Congrats! :)

rallamajoop August 14 2006, 02:01:48 UTC

Wow, thanks! I'm a sucker for fill-the-gaps fic myself (and guilty of writing a few of them, as you've probably picked). It's a fun thing about the KH series that they did (quite deliberately) leave so many gaps and ambiguities for the fans to speculate about.

chibitifa August 13 2006, 22:54:38 UTC

I agree with everyone. I really love the rhythm that you used and it flows very well. It wasn't interrupted in any way. Good job! ^^

rallamajoop August 14 2006, 02:15:57 UTC

Thanks. Lovely to hear you enjoyed it!

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rallamajoop August 14 2006, 14:14:06 UTC

Heh, you lot are going to give me an ego *g*. Thanks a lot!

bulky_monster August 14 2006, 15:02:24 UTC

Love. I really like how you tie together the glimpses we get of everyone's various stories between the games. Your use of present tense is appropriate and smooth. At times, it gets confusing as to whether Sora or Roxas is the acting character, but this actually underlines the reader's sense of the character's experience.

Pardon my grammar. I'm at work, and nearly comatose from boredom. Thanks for sharing this fic.

rallamajoop August 15 2006, 01:45:33 UTC

Thanks ^^. I was a little worried when I was writing this that the Sora-Roxas parts would get a confusing, particularly in the last section, so it's a relief to hear they still work in context.

And your grammer seems fine to me. I only wish mine was that good after I've been at work all day.