I really like the way you write, and the phrases you use. There's a rhythym to it, and feels very dream-like, peeking at how much the three of them have forgotten and what they remember.
Thanks! Dream sequences are one of those plot devices that are so easy to overuse that it's great to hear they worked here.
Out of curiousity, same rubyd from devart, right? I remember my sister faved your "Oops" pic a while back.. and a couple of others too ^^; Really cute stuff, we loved it.
I love fill-in-the-gap fanfics (aka what wasn't seen in the game) and yours is one of the best ones I've read. It has a nice flow and the way you described the dreams is believable (after all, dreams don't follow logic, space or time).
Wow, thanks! I'm a sucker for fill-the-gaps fic myself (and guilty of writing a few of them, as you've probably picked). It's a fun thing about the KH series that they did (quite deliberately) leave so many gaps and ambiguities for the fans to speculate about.
Love. I really like how you tie together the glimpses we get of everyone's various stories between the games. Your use of present tense is appropriate and smooth. At times, it gets confusing as to whether Sora or Roxas is the acting character, but this actually underlines the reader's sense of the character's experience.
Pardon my grammar. I'm at work, and nearly comatose from boredom. Thanks for sharing this fic.
Thanks ^^. I was a little worried when I was writing this that the Sora-Roxas parts would get a confusing, particularly in the last section, so it's a relief to hear they still work in context.
And your grammer seems fine to me. I only wish mine was that good after I've been at work all day.
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Out of curiousity, same rubyd from devart, right? I remember my sister faved your "Oops" pic a while back.. and a couple of others too ^^; Really cute stuff, we loved it.
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And yup, the one and the same. Thank you! :D
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I love fill-in-the-gap fanfics (aka what wasn't seen in the game) and yours is one of the best ones I've read. It has a nice flow and the way you described the dreams is believable (after all, dreams don't follow logic, space or time).
Congrats! :)
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Pardon my grammar. I'm at work, and nearly comatose from boredom. Thanks for sharing this fic.
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And your grammer seems fine to me. I only wish mine was that good after I've been at work all day.
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