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title: the story goes
author: chartre
rating: pg-13
pairing: nishikato
summary: ryo watches him and then turns his attention to his wife, but it's not like he forgets about the boy in the house.
notes: fictional. my first ever remix, of lightstylings' at sixteen; 1001 concisities. i'm afraid it's boring and lacks a rock n' roll ending, but i just hope i didn't kill ( Read more... )
author: chartre
rating: pg-13
pairing: nishikato
summary: ryo watches him and then turns his attention to his wife, but it's not like he forgets about the boy in the house.
notes: fictional. my first ever remix, of lightstylings' at sixteen; 1001 concisities. i'm afraid it's boring and lacks a rock n' roll ending, but i just hope i didn't kill ( Read more... )
I loved the original piece that lightstylings wrote and even though I know you're a great writer, I was still a little unsure when I saw that you were remixing it. But honestly, this is awesome. And it's just an amazing remix. I don't know how you managed to re-spin and re-tell the same story with such finesse and creativity!
Ryo looks back to three years with a stranger-turned-friend-turned-something-in-between and looks into the next year. He doesn’t expect anything, Ryo never does. He waits for anniversaries to come and go, waits for Shige and then he finally turns significantly twenty. They celebrate it with much simplicity, and then they move on after that.
I love the progress of Ryo and Shige's relationship from the beginning when they were no worse off than strangers until Ryo's maybe, maybe ready for them to be something more.
Their eyes don’t meet, but Ryo waits and watches. When they do, Ryo makes sure it stays there. He makes sure Shige can see everything before him, can remember the weight of this setting when Ryo kisses him, soft and slow just so it all ends and begins worthwhile for them.
I love the last line of this paragraph, where Ryo takes his time to make sure that his first kiss with Shige, that Shige's first kiss in general, is one worth remembering because he's simply not sure the relationship is going to work out. So that even if the start of what should be a relationship is really an end of sorts, it'll still be something Shige and him can keep.
Sorry for longish comment D: But I really love this piece! ♥
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Thank you for the longish comment, I love the details and extensive-ness of it~ This definitely just made my day even more worthwhile, I could give you my love for this, too ♥
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