Breaking Points - Chapter Four

[ragdoll987]

Title: Breaking Points
Author: Ragdoll
Pairing: Kirk/Spock
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Not mine, more's the pity.

Summary: When the Enterprise is asked to transport Vulcan colonists to their new home, Spock Prime comes with them. His presence changes everything - even the things Jim isn’t sure he wants to change.

Comments

[mercy_slays]

I've been reading this story since you first started writing it and at least been re-reading your previous chapters once every two days because it's just that beautifully written and the voices and scenes are so fleshed out I feel like I'm actually there as a bystander in the scene.

I couldn't resist commenting this time because I'm just utterly amazed by this, especially what Uhura told Spock about her earlier conversation with Spock Prime. Especially since well... Kirk didn't want to privy into it but Spock did. This really is just oh my god fantastic and I want to read more on Tarsus IV for more detail on what happened (could have happened in this case) to Kirk.

After reading the last chapter, I felt kind of... disappointed that well, Kirk isn't suffering from the backlash of the mind meld anymore and the idea that the memories and emotions of Kirk Prime in his head? That's just delicious to think about since there's mostly the implication that it would be Spock Prime's memories, not Kirk Prime's. (Have to ask, are they still

[alessiana]

Well that's interesting. My thought was that the aspects of memory were well handled in the last chapter so the story could move forward. Many an author would let a problem like that drag out for chapters on end, with no relief, and once relieved that would be the end; but here, the author moves the story towards different points of angst.

I love the way the previous chapter ended!

That's just my thought of course.

I'm seriously loving this.

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[mercy_slays]

I personally thought it was wrapped up too soon? (That could probably last another chapter, maybe, rather a set of five or more.) Especially since I haven't read something before that used the concept of Kirk Prime in Kirk's head. There was many things you can do with that concept I thought and well, I'm not complaining about the new angst we have lurking about in this fic.

As for the way the chapter ended, removal of Kirk Prime aside, it was fantastic. =)

[alessiana]

We can agree to disagree : )

We're both happy with the story which is what really counts. It is fantastic.

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[allbutwon]

Oh, I adore it just as much as I have the other parts. It's so long and beautifully written and the flow is just. I love the way Kirk couldn't help but ask, even if his instinct told him not to, and how he wore himself out emotionally with the reactions - you are such an amazing writer. Thank you for writing this.

[ragdoll987]

Thank you for commenting! I'm so stoked that people are enjoying this story - seriously, you guys make my day!

[to_special_hell]

I love this story so much.

You wield imagery like a child's plaything. Your style is so complicatedly simplistic. It's beautiful. And you have captured everyone's voice just perfectly.

I CANNOT wait for the next chapter <3

[ragdoll987]

"Your style is so complicatedly simplistic."

Omg, thank you! That's a lovely turn of phrase, I'm going to hug close now!

[thelilytriad]

AUGH.

I was commenting and then my computer froze and I HAD to reboot it JUST so I could comment.

I really love the relationship that you've created between Kirk and Spock Prime. It's very tender and oddly mentor-y and kind of... doomed?

I'm hoping that there will be some more Spock and Spock Prime interaction -- that boy needs to be smacked upside the head.

Also -- Tarsus? That was just... sharp. I mean, if Jim didn't bring it up himself, I can really see him reacting the way your Jim did.

Impatiently awaiting the next chapter!

[ragdoll987]

Tender and mentor-y and doomed.. you've hit the nail on the head. My goal with this story is to give pretty much everyone the depths of their tragedy and their joy, which from the reactions I seem to be doing okay, and I'm so happy about it!

[x_kchan_x]

I don't know if I have enough words to explain how much I love this story. No, really.

Aside from maybe "foaming at the mouth, waiting for more". Because seriously, every time I finish a chapter it leaves me craving more. ♥

[ragdoll987]

If I've addicted you then I've definitely done my job. ;) Schweet!