fic: Make Me Feel

[quiet_ingenue]

Title: Make Me Feel
Pairing: Peter/Elle (briefly), Sylar/Elle
Rating: R
Prompt:“I want to feel passion,
I want to feel pain.
I want to weep at the sound of your name.
Come make me laugh,
come make me cry...
just make me feel alive.”
Summary: Her mind isn't focused on much anymore except for the fact that she finds herself not being able to

Comments

[superkappa]

God, this was such a heartwrenching drabble. I really felt for Elle. Her and Peter mutually using one another is something I can totally buy, sadly.

And the part with Sylar was so emotional and raw. I especially loved:
Elle isn't sure if she's crying out because of the bite or the subsequent thrusts. All she knows that is she finally feels something and she's desperate to hold onto that for as long as she can. Because once this is over, she's going to go back to not feeling anything.

That really struck a chord with me.

And then in the end, when she finally could feel again and cry, that really broke my heart. But it also kind of makes me wonder what would happen next!

[quiet_ingenue]

I tried to make this a happy fic with the prompt but every time I wrote something, it just turned out sad. So I just went with it. D: Damn this pairing and angst just go so naturally, lol.

Oh man, the ending...getting there was such a process! I had a different ending written out but then it seemed way out of place so I took it out and replaced it with this one since it seemed to fit more with the tone of the fic.

For some reason, I keep leaving a lot of my one shots/drabbles open ended where I could continue or it could stand alone, lol. It's not even a conscious decision half the time!

I'm glad the fic touched you though! I was hoping it wouldn't read flat.

[superkappa]

Well, the movie the quote is from isn't exactly a happy one. I mean, of all of Kevin Smith's movies, Chasing Amy is definitely the most bittersweet. Especially the character of Joey, the one that quote comes from.

Ugh, I hate that, when you finally come up with an ending only for it to feel...wrong. So frustrating.

I do that with alot of my drabbles too, leaving it open ended. Sometimes on purpose, but sometimes not.

It wasn't flat at all!

[quiet_ingenue]

True, this movie is definitely no Jay & Silent Bob, Clerks, etc and there really isn't a happy ending.

Right? Initially the ending was a little bit happier but it just did not fit the context. Like yeah, Elle's damaged and a little crazy in the head but what I had originally written still probably wouldn't have been good.

[di_elle]

Thank you thank you for writing my prompt!
So beautiful done, too. So sad for Elle and Peter, in the first part.

Then Sylar fixing her, nice shout-out at the canfield house scene, here is Elle that feel numb where there was Sylar and apparently they just need to close a circle.

and the last line, poor poor Elle.

[quiet_ingenue]

Well thank you for putting out a prompt that inspired me to write something! :)

I'm glad you enjoyed it because I was worried you wanted a happier fic and this didn't turn out that way.

[di_elle]

well the prompt is not exactly happy, quite the contrary...

[dragynflies]

I really liked this, a lot. It might be in the top five of things you've written. You described the emotions and the situations really well -- very dark and gritty and I thought it was very well done.

[quiet_ingenue]

Thank you so much for the comment and it seriously means a lot to me that you could even read it all the way through.

[kristen_88]

That's so sad and so fascinating, I enjoyed reading every single word of it.
Perfect. Intense. Nice job!
I would love to read more of this.

[quiet_ingenue]

Thank you!

I don't know the likelihood of my writing a sequel to this fic because I think a sequel would just kinda ruin the flow of what I've set up here. But I won't completely rule it out! :)

[acinogan]

i really liked this - the part where she starts to think sylar is trying to fix her made me go "of COURSE he would do that! that is so smart."

very nice job portraying how all three of them have changed up to this point and how it changes the dynamics between them.

[quiet_ingenue]

I feel like the name of Volume 4 should have been "Damaged" rather than "Fugitives", hah! But thank you, I'm glad you liked it. :) I really wasn't sure how people were going to respond to this fic because it's not a happy fic and it's a rather dismal view of the world from Elle's eyes.